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When a grieving medic with deadly powers resists induction into the horsemen of the apocalypse, she must battle the remaining three in order to save the world.
Yeah, I think Lachlan's structure for the logline works really well...
Yeah, I think Lachlan’s structure for the logline works really well…
See lessWhen a search for Ned Kelly?s lost gold becomes a life or death battle, it is up to an introverted young Goth to stand up to the murderous local cop hunting them.
I think there's a sort of mental mismatch between "introverted Goth" and "Ned Kelly's gold" - and that could be a good thing! Can you phrase the logline in such a way that it plays up that contrast: something like "The only person who can prevent a murderous cop killing all the rival hunters for NedRead more
I think there’s a sort of mental mismatch between “introverted Goth” and “Ned Kelly’s gold” – and that could be a good thing! Can you phrase the logline in such a way that it plays up that contrast: something like “The only person who can prevent a murderous cop killing all the rival hunters for Ned Kelly’s gold is an introverted Goth” – okay, that’s shit, but can you see the structure I’m trying to get to…?
Also, there may be a problem with stakes. If the cop finds the gold, he gets rich and the others don’t. Not huge stakes, in cinematic terms. Or are the stakes that he’ll kill them? In which case finding the gold isn’t the ultimate goal, defeating the cop is, and the logline has to reflect that.
See lessA small Texas border town fights for its independence from Mexico and the U.S. after an earthquake changes the course of the Rio Grande River and makes it an island.
It is a nice concept, but as Paul says, what are the stakes and who's the hero? I'm intrigued, but I want to know who I'm following and what the consequences of success/failure will be.
It is a nice concept, but as Paul says, what are the stakes and who’s the hero? I’m intrigued, but I want to know who I’m following and what the consequences of success/failure will be.
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