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An ancient vampire re-awakens on a remote Irish island. An addicted American doctor must struggle with his own demons before confronting this evil.
As above, what's the connection between the addiction and the vamp - specfically, why does it make the doctor the best *and the worst* person to tackle the vamp? Yeah, I get the drug addiction = blood addiction thing, but you could make it more explicit and exciting in the logline? I aslo worry thatRead more
As above, what’s the connection between the addiction and the vamp – specfically, why does it make the doctor the best *and the worst* person to tackle the vamp? Yeah, I get the drug addiction = blood addiction thing, but you could make it more explicit and exciting in the logline?
I aslo worry that there’s nothing new and eye-catching about it. Boiled to its essence, it seems to be “yet another guy fights yet another vamp. Only in Ireland this time.” I know that sounds harsh, but – what are we going to see in this vamp movie that we’ve never seen before? Why should someone make your vamp movie and not any of the dozen others circulating round Hollywood?
See lessBeing forbidden to love maakes managing the world's perception of love easy. But when Rose experiences love for himself he puts his job and existence at stake.
First things first: Rose tends to be a female name. I'm still not sure whether this particular 'Rose' is male, or whether I'm not understanding the logline... Is this detail really worth confusing everyone over? Okay, so no one is allowed to love (romantic love only, presumably. Are they allowed toRead more
First things first: Rose tends to be a female name. I’m still not sure whether this particular ‘Rose’ is male, or whether I’m not understanding the logline… Is this detail really worth confusing everyone over?
Okay, so no one is allowed to love (romantic love only, presumably. Are they allowed to love their children, siblings, parents?) I’m not quite sure where managing the perception of something forbidden comes into this – if something’s forbidden, people tend either to avoid it like the plague, or rush out and do it, so I really don’t understand the importance of how they *perceive* something they can’t legally do…
I think this needs a big dollop of irony. ‘Rose’ needs to be in charge of enforcing the ban (a popular trope, see Logan’s Run, etc), and then he’s tempted to break it. Then he turns the world upside down to restore love to everyone, by overthrowing the system he used to work for. It’s a bit of a familiar idea, people being banned from feeling emotions by a futuristic society, but I guess it could be made to work…
See lessThrough proving himself innocent of his father's death, the monk Alyosha realizes his guilt as nurtured by Father Matthias, the renowned priest and Alyosha's dark mentor.
Okay: did he murder his father or not? Because this logline leaves me unsure about that: and I mean confused-unsure, not intrigued-and-want-to-know-more-unsure. Is this a contemporary story? What country is it happening in? What genre is it? Could be anything from detective to personal drama to supeRead more
Okay: did he murder his father or not? Because this logline leaves me unsure about that: and I mean confused-unsure, not intrigued-and-want-to-know-more-unsure.
Is this a contemporary story? What country is it happening in? What genre is it? Could be anything from detective to personal drama to supernatural thriller…
Can you reshape the logline to give us a sense of what actually happens in the movie? What is Alyosha’s goal, what are the stakes (what happens if he fails in his goal), what is his fatal character flaw that prevents him from achieving it?
I think there’s a really interesting nugget of an idea here, but you need to display it to better advantage in a clearer, punchier, eye-catching logline.
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