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A photojournalist will fight to stay alive after he is spotted snapping pictures of the Vice President shaking hands with a known terrorist at the Presidential Inauguration.
That's a nice snappy logline that gets us to the heart of the story. I'd suggest "must fight" rather than "will fight", it's slightly stronger.
That’s a nice snappy logline that gets us to the heart of the story. I’d suggest “must fight” rather than “will fight”, it’s slightly stronger.
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This is the clearest and best version of this logline so far, but the word "rival" is throwing me off. Is she actually going to play basketball against him? If not, she's not a rival. Would 'obstacle' or 'distraction' be more appropriate?
This is the clearest and best version of this logline so far, but the word “rival” is throwing me off. Is she actually going to play basketball against him? If not, she’s not a rival. Would ‘obstacle’ or ‘distraction’ be more appropriate?
See lessAn elite member of the galactic Special Forces is wrongly convicted for a crime committed by a congressman?s son. He must prove his innocence, and seek his revenge, while he serves his sentence at an experimental prison camp.
To clarify , I'm not say it *should* be a present-day story. I'm saying if it is set in the future, *why* is it set in the future? What does that give you that you wouldn't have in any other setting? For example, Lockdown is an 'escape an inescapable prison' story set in the future - and what the fuRead more
To clarify , I’m not say it *should* be a present-day story. I’m saying if it is set in the future, *why* is it set in the future? What does that give you that you wouldn’t have in any other setting?
For example, Lockdown is an ‘escape an inescapable prison’ story set in the future – and what the future setting gives you is *the reason the prison is inescapable*. It’s _in space_. You can’t get off it without a ship. So, good reason for the story to be set in the future. What’s the good reason for the future setting here?
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