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Seduced into a world of drugs, sex, and money after abandoning her loved ones, model-slash-actress hopeful must determine if losing herself, is worth it to become a star.
When I start developing a script, I imagine the story as if I were to write it as a 1st person short story. I do this to figure out which character is the main one. In a novel or short story, if it's first person, you don't want a character who is away from the action. In Percy Jackson it is Percy'sRead more
When I start developing a script, I imagine the story as if I were to write it as a 1st person short story. I do this to figure out which character is the main one. In a novel or short story, if it’s first person, you don’t want a character who is away from the action. In Percy Jackson it is Percy’s point of view, and in countless other first person novels.
See lessTelevision is a bit different because you have the freedom to spend entire episodes without a character, so a few more main characters work. But for a pilot I suggest telling a self-contained story that can be built upon later. A great video, from a great YouTube channel, talks about Breaking Bad’s pilot. Here’s a link to the video, which I think is a great resource.
I hope this helps.
When her occult bookshop is burned down, an angry, self-loathing Witch must stop a secret organisation from murdering powerful witches.
"Also I?m totally not sure how she?s going to take down this organisation, other than she?s more powerful than she knows." This statement brings to mind a deus ex machina device where she suddenly learns she's more powerful than she thought before and then she wins. Rather than have her win becauseRead more
“Also I?m totally not sure how she?s going to take down this organisation, other than she?s more powerful than she knows.”
This statement brings to mind a deus ex machina device where she suddenly learns she’s more powerful than she thought before and then she wins. Rather than have her win because she’s more powerful, I suggest making her use her wits to use the power she already has in order to defeat her opponent. Unless a major plot point is her trying to increase her power to be strong enough, then that’s my suggestion.
See lessFor example, where does the organization get its resources? She can attack them by attacking their resources. Why do they hunt witches? Is it based on misinformation or fear? Can she use compassion and information in an attempt to change people’s minds?
My point is that it doesn’t have to end in a big, CG filled battle(maybe with a sky beam?).
Just some things to think about.
Is this a sequel? Do you plan to make it into a franchise?
When her occult bookshop is burned down, an angry, self-loathing Witch must stop a secret organisation from murdering powerful witches.
I agree with Nir Shelter in that the concept has a good hook. But for the logline maybe you could be a little more specific? How exactly does she plan to stop this organization? If they've been murdering powerful witches, how can she stop them? Also, something to think about is the antagonist. FirstRead more
I agree with Nir Shelter in that the concept has a good hook. But for the logline maybe you could be a little more specific? How exactly does she plan to stop this organization? If they’ve been murdering powerful witches, how can she stop them?
See lessAlso, something to think about is the antagonist. First, consider choosing and developing a character, the main face of the opposing organization. Why do they want to kill witches?
Something I do for all of my stories(which are also Fantasy/SciFi) is create a logline from the perspective of the antagonist. What motivates them?