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When a nice holiday cruise turns bloody, a detective and failed parent must take down the threat and regain his self-worth.
"When a nice holiday cruise turns bloody, a detective and failed parent must take down the threat and regain his self-worth." Too vague. How does it turn bloody? "Failed parent". What does this mean? Neglectful? They let their child die? "regain his self-worth" I'm assuming your referring to the detRead more
“When a nice holiday cruise turns bloody, a detective and failed parent must take down the threat and regain his self-worth.”
Too vague. How does it turn bloody?
“Failed parent”. What does this mean? Neglectful? They let their child die?
“regain his self-worth” I’m assuming your referring to the detective with this, but since you have two subjects in this sentence it means you need to specify one of them.
But, regardless, that is not a plot. What do they do to take down the threat? Do they have to do detective work? Question witnesses?
-What is the goal? And who is the main character? Is it the both of them? (is it a buddy film?)
-What action do they do to achieve this goal?
Example:?When a bullet-ridden corpse is found on a cruise, a detective must work with a depressed ex-cop to find the killer before the cruise returns to land.(~27 words)
See lessAn arrogant, popular high school homophobe, plagued by a series of bizarre electrical mishaps, struggles to overcome what he believes is a curse and, after he discovers a conspiracy that threatens their town, must work with gay and lesbian teen witches who despise him. [One-hour primetime series, Veronica Mars meets Charmed]
"An arrogant, popular high school homophobe, plagued by a series of bizarre electrical mishaps, struggles to overcome what he believes is a curse and, after he discovers a conspiracy that threatens their town, must work with gay and lesbian teen witches who despise him." The last sentence, that's whRead more
“An arrogant, popular high school homophobe, plagued by a series of bizarre electrical mishaps, struggles to overcome what he believes is a curse and, after he discovers a conspiracy that threatens their town, must work with gay and lesbian teen witches who despise him.”
The last sentence, that’s what you need to describe. Work with them to do?what?
Example:?A?homophobic teenager must work with gay and lesbian witches to…
See lessWhen his grades slip too much for regular coursework to fix, an impulsive prankster must complete community service without incident at a strict military school to graduate junior high with his best friends.
"Last thing what is at stake? What?s the worst that would happen should he fail to graduate with his friends? Nothing really, he?ll repeat a year and then graduate." I agree with much of what you said, but I wonder if maybe you want stakes that are too high. The stakes are relative to the character,Read more
“Last thing what is at stake? What?s the worst that would happen should he fail to graduate with his friends? Nothing really, he?ll repeat a year and then graduate.”
See lessI agree with much of what you said, but I wonder if maybe you want stakes that are too high. The stakes are relative to the character, a realistic story about a young?boy. Does any kid?want to spend another year in school? What will that look like to his friends? His reputation will be ruined.
So, yes, the stakes are fairly low, but relatively, I think they are okay. Maybe he could add something else, but really what else can be at stake for him?
One last note, it really does seem that the only stakes films put out now are saving the world/universe.