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When a veteran detective takes his son out for a cruise, an old acquaintance looking for revenge shows up. The little detective outsmarts the acquaintance of this dad that happens to be the killer of his mother that his father was never able to catch.
When a boy finds evidence linking a family friend to his mother's unsolved murder, he must solve the case his father failed to while he was a detective.?(~28 words)Your version is too long. I cut out the crusie and revenge angle because the cruise is just setting and unless the setting has somethingRead more
When a boy finds evidence linking a family friend to his mother’s unsolved murder, he must solve the case his father failed to while he was a detective.?(~28 words)
Your version is too long. I cut out the crusie and revenge angle because the cruise is just setting and unless the setting has something to do with the plot then don’t include it. The revenge part I cut because it just seems to complicate matters a bit. Something else is that your logline doesn’t focus on one main character, which from what I got is the detective’s son. So frame other characters as they are in relation to the MC. (rather than say “a veteran detective” identify the man as the MC father.
See lessTake a look at the ‘Training’ tap at the top of the site to see what a good logline formula should include.
In a drought plagued future, a world weary scientist discovers water, unleashing an ancient evil that threatens the lives of her small community
An interesting concept. What is this ancient evil? What is the MC's goal? Why does her discovering water unleash this ancient evil? This version is too vague.
An interesting concept. What is this ancient evil? What is the MC’s goal? Why does her discovering water unleash this ancient evil? This version is too vague.
See lessThe Angel of God is brutalized by the police because of the color of his skin, and now his daughter a sergeant on the police force must choose her job or her family. The salvation of humanity is dependent on her choice. http://johnclandenstine.wix.com/thesentient
Why does the daughter matter? Why is her decision so important? My suggestion: After she finds out that a brutalized homeless man is an angel, a cop must find a way to kill him before he takes his vengeance on humanity. (~28 words)
Why does the daughter matter? Why is her decision so important?
See lessMy suggestion: After she finds out that a brutalized homeless man is an angel, a cop must find a way to kill him before he takes his vengeance on humanity. (~28 words)