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A secretly gay detective in the 1940’s must investigate the murder of the man with whom he had a love affair with.
Foxtrot, The logline clearly states the objective goal of the detective, to solve the case. So yes, concluding the case, solving it, is the present struggle he must overcome. Once he solves it, or fails to solve it at the climax, the conflict is resolved. ?It also implies a great personal stake, thaRead more
Foxtrot,
The logline clearly states the objective goal of the detective, to solve the case. So yes, concluding the case, solving it, is the present struggle he must overcome. Once he solves it, or fails to solve it at the climax, the conflict is resolved. ?It also implies a great personal stake, that in less tolerable times, the man could be killed just for being gay. So I’m not sure what you’re getting at.
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This logline has a nice hook. It clearly presents it at the beginning and it goes on to describe the plot concisely. It implies high stakes. I think the logline is a good one. Good luck with this story.
This logline has a nice hook. It clearly presents it at the beginning and it goes on to describe the plot concisely. It implies high stakes. I think the logline is a good one.
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Question: I suspect that most people here, like me, struggle to focus on the part of their story that’s important to logline. Mine is a complex of murders, mainly focused around concealing a galactic insurance fraud but including some revenge attempts by the contract killer. From MC’s perspective, there are multiple murders, a possible insurance fraud, the prime murderer is specifically after him and/or his family for revenge… Can people please suggest how to choose which elements/plot lines to logline and which to leave for the synopsis. e.g. in the movie “UP”, which is the more important: Carl reaching the Falls to fulfil his promise, Carl’s redemption, Carl speudo-adopting Russell.. etc.
Hi Russell, good question. Normally a logline should focus on the main story. The story that drives the main conflict. In Star Wars Episode IV, the main conflict is between Luke and the Empire, embodied by Darth Vader. After his family is killed, Luke has nothing left, the only thing he can do is toRead more
Hi Russell, good question.
Normally a logline should focus on the main story. The story that drives the main conflict. In Star Wars Episode IV, the main conflict is between Luke and the Empire, embodied by Darth Vader. After his family is killed, Luke has nothing left, the only thing he can do is to go with Ben Kenobi, learn to use the Force, and join the Rebellion. That’s the main story. The only one which should be described in the logline.
There are a few exceptions. The most important thing in a logline is the hook, something which will make the reader want to read your script and possibly invest in your story. For some movies, the main conflict isn’t the hook, the more interesting. It’s a side conflict, one that arises because of the main conflict.
But no matter what, a logline for a film or television series should describe the external conflict, the visual action we can see on screen.
Judging on your brief description,?it sounds like?you need to retool your concept to include the galactic fraud into the inciting incident. People are being murdered because of this fraud, ingrain the SciFi element into the main conflict, give it a hook that will stand out from countless other detective and revenge stories.
I hope this helps.
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