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A grieving truck driver has a life affirming conversation with a mysterious stranger over his CB radio
"A grieving truck driver has a life affirming conversation with a mysterious stranger over his CB radio. "That's it? What's the conflict? What goal does the truck driver pursue? What's conflict gets resolved at the climax? It doesn't matter how short a story is, story is conflict.Check out the FormuRead more
“A grieving truck driver has a life affirming conversation with a mysterious stranger over his CB radio. “
That’s it? What’s the conflict? What goal does the truck driver pursue? What’s conflict gets resolved at the climax? It doesn’t matter how short a story is, story is conflict.
Check out the Formula tab at the top of the page for information on creating a standard ?logline. There is also an Examples tab for people who have posted loglines for movies or shows that have already been released.
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When a yound man falls in-love with a beautiful woman, he fights for his life, when her jealous fiancee determines to kill him.
This logline attempt suffers from multiple problems. So first of all I suggest you look over the Formula tab at the top of the page. Now onto the problems. The logline has no sense of coherence, and seems to be chronologically jumbled. It is also vague. Reading how it is now, how does a young man faRead more
This logline attempt suffers from multiple problems. So first of all I suggest you look over the Formula tab at the top of the page.
Now onto the problems.
The logline has no sense of coherence, and seems to be chronologically jumbled. It is also vague. Reading how it is now, how does a young man falling in love lead to him having to fight for his life? Shouldn’t the jealous fianc? (a male who is engaged is described as a fianc? with one ‘?’, while female has one accented ‘e’ and one without.) want to kill him before he has to fight for his life?
What is the main character’s goal? What does he wish to accomplish? What conflict will be resolved by the end of the climax? What specific event causes the character to pursue this goal? What is the antagonist’s goal? Why is he pursuing that goal?
How does “fights for his life” translate into a specific, achievable goal? Also, the logline mentions nothing to suggest the woman falls in love with the main character or anything to give the antagonist reason to want to kill the main character.
But all of that aside, the single most important thing for a concept is it’s hook. The thing that will make a producer want to read your script. Your logline suggests nothing new, unique, something to set it apart from countless other dramas about two men fighting over a woman.
I hope this helps.
See lessWhen a hardcore gamer learns the true nature of an horrific childhood experience, he must face the little black evil that tormented him as a child again.
"When a hardcore gamer learns the true nature of an horrific childhood experience, he must face the little black evil that tormented him as a child again." The logline suffers from vague descriptions. What is the true nature of this childhood experience? Is there a way to describe it in a clear wayRead more
“When a hardcore gamer learns the true nature of an horrific childhood experience, he must face the little black evil that tormented him as a child again.”
The logline suffers from vague descriptions. What is the true nature of this childhood experience? Is there a way to describe it in a clear way in only a few words? What is the “little black evil” he must face?
A logline is used to pitch your script to someone who can make it into a movie. Make them want to read the script. Using vague descriptions tells them nothing about the script and potentially hides something that could hook them, make them want to read the script.
I admit, I haven’t watched many horror movies, but even then this movie suggests nothing different from the movies I have seen or heard about. What is something unique or cool that will make a producer want to read this script. What is the hook? Don’t be vague about it, put it front and center in the logline. Make it grab the reader’s attention.
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