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Two farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.
What was the crime for which the farmer was framed? >> he watches his sweetheart and mother of his child being executed That's a very compelling story beat. But it raises the question: what is his primary motivation for coming back: to avenge her death or exonerate himself from the false accusation?
What was the crime for which the farmer was framed?
>> he watches his sweetheart and mother of his child being executed
That’s a very compelling story beat. But it raises the question: what is his primary motivation for coming back: to avenge her death or exonerate himself from the false accusation?
See lessTwo farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.
Well, there's the setting: Iceland. And the time period: the 16th century. Those 2 elements render the screenplay a lot different than 1000's of others. So I suggest including the historical time frame as an element in the logline. What constitutes the bulk of your story? Is most of the story aboutRead more
Well, there’s the setting: Iceland. And the time period: the 16th century. Those 2 elements render the screenplay a lot different than 1000’s of others. So I suggest including the historical time frame as an element in the logline.
What constitutes the bulk of your story? Is most of the story about what happens after he gets back to Iceland, how he settles scores?
Or is most of the story about his desperate struggle to survive in a barbaric prison, the harrowing escape, the daunting obstacles to getting back to Iceland? (The latter would be more interesting to me. And if that is, indeed, the bulk of the story, then I suggest the logline be refocused on that aspect.)
Told in a book, like the Count of Monte Cristo, the story has the luxury of being able to give equal weight and space to both aspects, to all chapters in what would constitute a saga. Ditto as a miniseries. But the time constraints and dramatic conventions of a feature film entail focusing on one aspect. A tough choice, but…
See lessTwo farmers in Iceland are framed by the Sheriff and sent to Denmark to slave in chains for the rest of their life. The younger one returns after 20 years to realize he has a son and wants revenge.
What is the historical time frame? And framed for what? After twenty years of cruel labor in a Danish prison for a [murder?] he didn't commit, an Icelandic farmer escapes and returns to Iceland for revenge against his false accusers. While the discovery that he has a son is an important embellishmenRead more
What is the historical time frame? And framed for what?
After twenty years of cruel labor in a Danish prison for a [murder?] he didn’t commit, an Icelandic farmer escapes and returns to Iceland for revenge against his false accusers.
While the discovery that he has a son is an important embellishment to the story, it’s not essential to the logline. The logline should focus on the plot, which distilled to its essence is: a man who has been wronged seeks revenge.
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