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Hello, I think that when you will have changed ?must reveal a painful truth? and "to survive the horrors that threatens their sanity and life" into something clear and understandable, you'll have a viable logline.
Hello, I think that when you will have changed ?must reveal a painful truth? and “to survive the horrors that threatens their sanity and life” into something clear and understandable, you’ll have a viable logline.
See lessAfter receiving his late mother?s camera, the outcast son wants to become a photographer, but once his older brother, the glorified heir, dies, the manipulative grandfather resorts to blackmail to force his own grandson to take over the farm.
Find your true inciting event, it seems to me that the story begins when the problem shows up, so when the granfather blackmail him. I don t think blackmail is the good word anyway. Focus on story, what happens?
Find your true inciting event, it seems to me that the story begins when the problem shows up, so when the granfather blackmail him. I don t think blackmail is the good word anyway. Focus on story, what happens?
See lessWhen a cynical surgeon renounces his ancestral ties with a cabalistic tradition, he becomes the target of a dark force and must battle a phantasmagorical creature unleashed by the dark force to destroy him and everything he holds dear.
I like this one! I see just a couple of problems, 1-the main character is passive ("he finds himself the target"). Focus about his actions, more than his reactions. What does the main character do? 2-"a supernatural, dark force that unleashes a phantasmagorical, savage creature to destroy him and evRead more
I like this one!
I see just a couple of problems,
1-the main character is passive (“he finds himself the target”). Focus about his actions, more than his reactions. What does the main character do?
2-“a supernatural, dark force that unleashes a phantasmagorical, savage creature to destroy him and everything he holds dear.” this is a beautiful and rich prose but not appropriate for a logline. Too long and too vague an too complicated (a force that unleashes a creature… well A creature is enough!)
One more thing, “estranged” is one of the most used adjective to characterize the protagonist. And?I alwayes feel like?the writer failed to find a truly appropriate adjective. What I like is when?the adjective makes sense with the story, be linked to another element, it represent a flaw to be overcome.
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