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An ordinary young man, is forced to become humankind?s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, wants to blow up the Earth.
This is much better but still too vague in my opinion.
This is much better but still too vague in my opinion.
See less"An ordinary young man, is physiologically transmuted by an unimaginable energy that predates history and is irrevocably forced to become humankind?s sole savior when a diabolical alien race, seeking that power wants to blow up the Earth."
"transmuted by an unimaginable energy that predates history": I don't understand this... Concretely what happens to him? "irrevocably forced", only "forced would be enough but the whole expression seems useless to me in this context. Try to rewrite it making clear what is the inciting event and whatRead more
“transmuted by an unimaginable energy that predates history”: I don’t understand this… Concretely what happens to him?
“irrevocably forced”, only “forced would be enough but the whole expression seems useless to me in this context.
Try to rewrite it making clear what is the inciting event and what the plot is about.
As far as I’m concerned, what I get from the current formulation is “an ordinary man gains superpowers to defy an alien invasion” and I found it too vague and not enough original. I’m sure you have a clearer vision but you have to find the right words to write it in a logline format.
Good luck,
See lessA FEMALE ALIEN LANDS ON THE PANET IN THE SPACE WHERE ONLY MALES LIVE. THE MALES GET SCARED FROM THE FEMALE BECAUSE THEY HAVE NEVER SEEN ANY. THE FEMALE TRIES TO SOLVE THE HISTORICAL PROBLEM OF THE MALES'S PLANET, SHE WANTS FEMALES BACK THERE.
Hello, I think you have a good idea but you need to structure it before you can call it a logline. Don't hesitate to google afew logline writing guides. Remember that confusion doens't build curiosity. I think you're not really talking about aliens, and it's not really important at this stage to undRead more
Hello, I think you have a good idea but you need to structure it before you can call it a logline.
See lessDon’t hesitate to google afew logline writing guides.
Remember that confusion doens’t build curiosity. I think you’re not really talking about aliens, and it’s not really important at this stage to understand if the planet is the earth or not. If the goal of the main character is to have womans back on the planet, you have to tell us why, what are the stakes, what if she fails? I’m not sure if you can build a plot with this goal. Maybe solving the mistery of the planet would be a byproduct of her real goal.
You can start with something like:
“when a feminist space traveler crashes on a planet where there’s only males, she must ________ before ________”.