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When a young urban explorer meets her new boyfriend, she will discover secret locations that could change space and time.
Hello, this is too vague in my opinion : "secret locations that could change space and time" (what does it mean?). secondly, is there a link between what appears to be the inciting incident (meeting the new boyfriend) and the discovery of the new secret location? If so, it could be specified what isRead more
Hello,
See lessthis is too vague in my opinion : “secret locations that could change space and time” (what does it mean?).
secondly, is there a link between what appears to be the inciting incident (meeting the new boyfriend) and the discovery of the new secret location? If so, it could be specified what is the link because it is not clear.
What is the main conflict that fuel the story and what his the main character’s goal?
After leaving prison, two aging con men go straight by opening a coffee shop but get pulled into mob-like turf war with the other caf?s in a small seaside town.
Yes a turf war between ?coffee shops can be funny and original. As a logline, I miss a clear inciting event (what is the first act of war?). I wonder if opening the coffee shop can be the inciting event. And I miss a goal and clear stakes. How does the fact that they are con men affect tge story? ItRead more
Yes a turf war between ?coffee shops can be funny and original. As a logline, I miss a clear inciting event (what is the first act of war?). I wonder if opening the coffee shop can be the inciting event. And I miss a goal and clear stakes. How does the fact that they are con men affect tge story? It seems to me that this help them to win the war, or do they learn that a clean business is harder than they thought… in other words, what is the main conflict?
See lessAfter receiving his late mother?s camera, the outcast son wants to become a photographer, but once his older brother, the glorified heir, dies, the manipulative grandfather resorts to blackmail to force his own grandson to take over the farm.
Find your true inciting event, it seems to me that the story begins when the problem shows up, so when the granfather blackmail him. I don t think blackmail is the good word anyway. Focus on story, what happens?
Find your true inciting event, it seems to me that the story begins when the problem shows up, so when the granfather blackmail him. I don t think blackmail is the good word anyway. Focus on story, what happens?
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