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A animal activist discovers human experiments not animal during a raid. She must survive murderous security to rescue a test subject and tell the world the truth.
Hello, I love the idea of an animal activist who discover human experiments. This is an excellent initial situation in my opinion. I like the character of an animal activist.?I think many things can happens and everything in one night raid (one action time set). It starts with an "easy" mission (toRead more
Hello, I love the idea of an animal activist who discover human experiments. This is an excellent initial situation in my opinion. I like the character of an animal activist.?I think many things can happens and everything in one night raid (one action time set). It starts with an “easy” mission (to sneak in a makeup factory or whatever).?A group of activists. A clear turning point : there are humans experiments, a choice : to leave or trying to save a victim (a kid?) – the activists are killed one by one by the security. The mains characters may reach the lowest point when they are both kidnapped by the security. Then they escape and finally succed (or not).
Besides, I encourage you to work more on the logline format.
See lessA young writer is unknowingly helped to her breaking point to produce a master piece.
Hello, I recommend you to watch ?Satansbraten ?de Fassbinder. In this movie, as far as I remember, the point that to achieve a masterpiece the author must reach his breaking point is clearly stated and dramatically explored. You should work a little more on the concept to give a better characterizatRead more
Hello,
I recommend you to watch ?Satansbraten ?de Fassbinder. In this movie, as far as I remember, the point that to achieve a masterpiece the author must reach his breaking point is clearly stated and dramatically explored.
You should work a little more on the concept to give a better characterization of the characters and to make clear what will be the main conflict which fuels the movie. The main character seems too passive (what does he do? what is his goal?). In other words, your logline seems too vague to me, but the concept is interesting.
See lessA group of explorers discover a previously uncharted island, only to discover the terrifying reason why it wasn’t discovered earlier. Now, trapped, they must find a way to escape the island’s horrors.
Hello, the last rewrite is much better, still it seems to me that it's too vague to create interest in the reader. I personally don't like expressions like "change himself in the process" because it's more a promise of what you want to do than a proof that you master your story. All movies show someRead more
Hello, the last rewrite is much better, still it seems to me that it’s too vague to create interest in the reader.
See lessI personally don’t like expressions like “change himself in the process” because it’s more a promise of what you want to do than a proof that you master your story. All movies show some kind of “change” so it’s useless to talk about it in this vague form.