1. Posted: February 27, 2016In:

    When an introverted waitress falls in love, she must seek out the man of her dreams, learning to overcome her fear of rejection.

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    Try to focus about what is unique in your story. There must be something very specific and original, or an original combination of known elements to boost the concept.

    Try to focus about what is unique in your story. There must be something very specific and original, or an original combination of known elements to boost the concept.

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  2. Posted: February 27, 2016In:

    a narcissistic young woman must learn to love unconditionally before she can save her suicidal friend, after a hunky surfer interrupts her rehabilitation plan she has organised for her friend’s recovery.

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    Hello, is it really a comedy? In this case it should?be clear from the logline itself.

    Hello, is it really a comedy? In this case it should?be clear from the logline itself.

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  3. Posted: February 27, 2016In:

    When an incorruptible young girl finds herself hired by a gang of thugs she faces prison time unless she can cover up or reverse their last crime.

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    Hello, focus about 1 specific inciting incident (what really puts the story in motion). It seems to me that the inciting incident is the discovery that her bosses?are gangsters : When a incorruptible secretary discovers her bosses are gangsters ... then what ?

    Hello, focus about 1 specific inciting incident (what really puts the story in motion).
    It seems to me that the inciting incident is the discovery that her bosses?are gangsters :
    When a incorruptible secretary discovers her bosses are gangsters … then what ?

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