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An on the edge of your seat drama about an NYPD detective who falls in love with a woman; who?s brother is the head of a drug cartel and the detective?s partner gone bad, determined to end their romance.
Wait, who's determined to end which romance? Detective with the woman or detective's partner with a cartel brother? I'm confused, yet pretty sure I'm not on the edge of my seat.
Wait, who’s determined to end which romance? Detective with the woman or detective’s partner with a cartel brother? I’m confused, yet pretty sure I’m not on the edge of my seat.
See lessIn a fantasy world he creates, an aspiring young actor lives his life as an acclaimed star but is unable to live like this in the real world because he fears he isn’t really good enough.
Try amping up "what others want" into more of a antagonistic challenge somehow. Maybe a boss figure?
Try amping up “what others want” into more of a antagonistic challenge somehow. Maybe a boss figure?
See lessSpiritually gifted twins seek revenge against their evil cyborg uncle as they race to find fabled elemtental orbs.
Gene, you keep rewriting this yet miss something. Spiritual doesn't add much as an adjective to your protagonist. Give them something more. Is this their special powers? If so, what exactly are they? Spirit vs evil cyborg? My money is on cyborg to win. What did this uncle cyborg do to them? Then youRead more
Gene, you keep rewriting this yet miss something.
Spiritual doesn’t add much as an adjective to your protagonist. Give them something more. Is this their special powers? If so, what exactly are they?
Spirit vs evil cyborg? My money is on cyborg to win. What did this uncle cyborg do to them?
Then you throw in orbs for no clear reason. Do they need to orbs to defeat the cyborg? If so, mention that.
Focus this plot finer.
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