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When a TV program is set to launch an expose on a commune, a member who sought refuge in the group because his grandfather’s murder was instigated by the media, devices a plan to sabotage the TV network and protect his identity.
Roberto, I strongly suggest that you un-complicate this logline by starting over and focusing on what your story could really be about. Think of a logline as an elevator pitch that was taken apart by a scalpel.
Roberto,
I strongly suggest that you un-complicate this logline by starting over and focusing on what your story could really be about. Think of a logline as an elevator pitch that was taken apart by a scalpel.
See lessA broke bounty hunter with schizophrenia and down to his final pill, must catch an elusive fugitive in extremely isolated territory before his hallucinations kick in.
Benny,The first problem that leaps out at me is that the time bomb of "before his hallucinations kick in" is not strong enough. It sounds to me like he should get that medically taken care of before he attempts to catch murderers.While healthcare and paying for meds is one of the top concerns of peoRead more
Benny,
The first problem that leaps out at me is that the time bomb of “before his hallucinations kick in” is not strong enough. It sounds to me like he should get that medically taken care of before he attempts to catch murderers.
While healthcare and paying for meds is one of the top concerns of people across the world, and easily identified with, I’m not sure if including that in the logline is worth the space. People want to know about the protag vs the antag and what must be overcome/resisted.
Now, if he needed to catch a killer for bounty payment to have a surgical procedure before… ?
Now you got something solid to work with.
I would focus on the “sick” protag vs whatever is special about the antag that this guy is qualified to deal with.
See lessAn estranged successful movie director and a hotshot film producer must stop a rival Head of Studio from buying out their companies.
Complex, What's gonna happen if they do buy out their companies? People usually like that cause they get rich. Will he buy them out and shut em down? Otherwise, sounds interesting.
Complex,
What’s gonna happen if they do buy out their companies? People usually like that cause they get rich. Will he buy them out and shut em down?
Otherwise, sounds interesting.
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