1. Posted: July 29, 2017In:

    An immature government programmer’s promotion is denied by his overbearing boss, so he resorts to childish pranks with his beleaguered coworkers in the hope he’ll get transferred.

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I liked the first version better.

    I liked the first version better.

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  2. Posted: July 29, 2017In:

    An immature government programmer’s promotion is denied by his overbearing boss, so he resorts to childish pranks with his beleaguered coworkers in the hope he’ll get transferred.

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Nikki, This sounds good structurally, especially since it's a comedy. Is it a feature or series?

    Nikki,

    This sounds good structurally, especially since it’s a comedy. Is it a feature or series?

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  3. Posted: July 28, 2017In:

    After being dumped a woman must survive in the city without her sugar daddy boyfriend and avoid the millennial fate, moving home with her parents.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Shyla, The fate of moving back in with your parents is not a final restitution for a main character. What you need to focus on is the adventure she is thrust upon and what she must overcome in order to avoid her ultimate fate of failure. Think the movie Adentures in babysitting for direction. A womaRead more

    Shyla,

    The fate of moving back in with your parents is not a final restitution for a main character. What you need to focus on is the adventure she is thrust upon and what she must overcome in order to avoid her ultimate fate of failure.

    Think the movie Adentures in babysitting for direction.

    A woman must survive...

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