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Three sisters are forced to join forces when Alzheimer and stroke hit their family and they need to take care of their parents while learning all about motherhood, forgiveness and the true meaning of happiness
Rose, Three sisters forced to join forces sounds weird. They are already family. I would reword this to describe what sacrifices they are making by coming together. Otherwise, this sounds like a theme you can explore in various, humanistic ways. My only suggestion is to be sure you have a clear protRead more
Rose,
Three sisters forced to join forces sounds weird. They are already family. I would reword this to describe what sacrifices they are making by coming together.
Otherwise, this sounds like a theme you can explore in various, humanistic ways. My only suggestion is to be sure you have a clear protagonist, because studios and gatekeepers often look for it in a story.
See lessWhen a family-less teenage Jewish boy encounters a girl depicted as Jewish and promises to be together before he is sent to a Nazi camp, he gets help from a Commandant to be acknowledged she is Hitler?s daughter, but he decides to keep the promise and find her out.
Andrew, Try this technique, What you've written is how you would explain your story while riding in an elevator and pitching to a director. What you need to write is a stripped down, basic explanation of what (1) sets your main story into motion, (2) what your main character is challenged with, andRead more
Andrew,
Try this technique,
What you’ve written is how you would explain your story while riding in an elevator and pitching to a director.
What you need to write is a stripped down, basic explanation of what (1) sets your main story into motion, (2) what your main character is challenged with, and (3) what he must do before something serious and final occurs to the universe your MC resides in.
See lessIn her online search for ?Mr. Right,? a timid computer programmer builds an algorithm that evolves into a rogue Artificial Intelligence?which the government wants to terminate.
Kinda like the sex reversals from the 80's movies and such. Only they didn't take themselves too seriously. You have this listed as drama. In her online search for ?Mr. Right,? a timid computer programmer builds an algorithm that evolves into a rogue Artificial Intelligence?which the government wantRead more
Kinda like the sex reversals from the 80’s movies and such. Only they didn’t take themselves too seriously. You have this listed as drama.
In her online search for ?Mr. Right,? a timid computer programmer builds an algorithm that evolves into a rogue Artificial Intelligence?which the government wants to terminate.
For the logline sakes, I would eliminate “online search for MR. Right” Skip right to describing the MC. In this case, “timid” should be replaced with “ambitious,” because that’s exactly what this chore is.
What does the MC have to do before something happens to the intelligence by the ruthless government? Why does the govt want to terminate it? Is it a threat somehow?
Overall, this sounds intriguing, hope you have a great MC and a clever twist on this not so unique genre. GL
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