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  1. Posted: July 19, 2017In: Action

    When a billionaire futurist is killed, a vengeful ex-assassin is forced to confront her sanity as she fights to discover who has been manipulating her memories to make her the world?s most feared killer.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on July 20, 2017 at 1:46 am

    Pyroclown, We got a lot of good things going on here but also a lot of things that don't go well together. First, When a billionaire futurist is killed -- This is the inciting incident you included which doesn't seem to link to the next part of the Logline: the MC. If the billionaire is important toRead more

    Pyroclown,

    We got a lot of good things going on here but also a lot of things that don’t go well together.

    First,

    When a billionaire futurist is killed —

    This is the inciting incident you included which doesn’t seem to link to the next part of the Logline: the MC. If the billionaire is important to the MC, then state that, otherwise, you can cut that out and just begin with the MC and her story.

    Vengeful ex-assassin —

    Sounds weird. A good assassin should be disciplined and almost free from emotion to be capable of doing their job.

    Forced to confront her sanity —

    May sound intriguing, but it’s vague and really not a special thing. Everyone has to maintain sanity on some level.

    Discover who is manipulating memories… —

    Here we have what I hope is the meat of your movie, the part I want to see played out. The sci-fi element mixed with the contemporary killer for money.

    If she’s already a ‘retired’ assassin, then why would it matter if she retains ‘the world’s most feared killer’ title?

    The assassin’s life is not a subject rarely explored, so you need to come in with a very fresh take on this genre. Hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: July 19, 2017In: Drama

    After a young businessman is told that he is a loser and his life is lonely and meaningless, he observes the people in his city and sees what makes them feel loved so that he too can be like them.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on July 19, 2017 at 9:05 am

    Jason, This sounds like a self-help seminar rather than a movie hook. What's unique that this business guy has to encounter or conquer to achieve his goal when the curtain goes down? You're going to need a lot more to interest a party into making this into a feature. Try to list some more about wherRead more

    Jason,

    This sounds like a self-help seminar rather than a movie hook. What’s unique that this business guy has to encounter or conquer to achieve his goal when the curtain goes down? You’re going to need a lot more to interest a party into making this into a feature.

    Try to list some more about where your story goes.

    Good luck

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  3. Posted: July 18, 2017In: Horror

    A research facility in Antarctica comes across an alien force that can become anything it touches with 100% accuracy. The members must now find out who’s human and who’s not before it’s too late. THE THING – 1982

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on July 18, 2017 at 11:29 pm

    One of my all time favorite movies. The log gives away just enough, but fails to reveal the isolation that made this movie one of the most chilling tales ever put on screen.

    One of my all time favorite movies. The log gives away just enough, but fails to reveal the isolation that made this movie one of the most chilling tales ever put on screen.

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