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Unable to come to terms with her stillbirth, a desperate doula fakes a pregnancy and kidnaps an expectant be mother to steal her baby. Can she kill her or let her go, risking everything.
I second what dpg suggests. Flipping the roles of the prot- and the antagonist creates enoughempathy to follow the chilling story. Making the pregnant woman an illegal immigrant puts her in even more jeopardy and pressure (even before the psychokiller arrives). Plus, it can create an extra level ifRead more
I second what dpg suggests. Flipping the roles of the prot- and the antagonist creates enoughempathy to follow the chilling story. Making the pregnant woman an illegal immigrant puts her in even more jeopardy and pressure (even before the psychokiller arrives). Plus, it can create an extra level if social commentary.
See lessA young man with electric superpowers must find the balance of good and evil within himself before a villain sends humanity back to the Dark Ages.
OK, I get it. I first read the later log line on the same story, and now I'm reading this previous version. Your problem is trying to avoid writing a specific ACTION. (As in EVENT, CHARACTER, ACTION, The holy trinity of the log line, as described in the formula page on this website.) So, as others bRead more
OK, I get it. I first read the later log line on the same story, and now I’m reading this previous version.
Your problem is trying to avoid writing a specific ACTION. (As in EVENT, CHARACTER, ACTION, The holy trinity of the log line, as described in the formula page on this website.)
So, as others before me have advised you, you have to write a specific outer motivation: defeating the villain.
See lessWhen a power-hungry villain begins stealing electricity, A young man with electric superpowers must learn to accept the balance of good and evil within himself before humanity is sent back to the Dark Ages.
I agree with the previews commenters about subjective and objective. Here are some more notes: Isn't this villain identical to Marvel's Electro? Electric superpowers? Are they the same with the villain's? I kind of need more information. Whether humanity?without electricity?would turn back to the DaRead more
I agree with the previews commenters about subjective and objective.
Here are some more notes:
Isn’t this villain identical to Marvel’s Electro?
Electric superpowers? Are they the same with the villain’s? I kind of need more information.
Whether humanity?without electricity?would turn back to the Dark Ages or to something else is an interesting debate. I wouldn’t assume that it necessarily would. Technology would crumble in a large scale, but I believe there is a lot more to civilization than electric power.
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