1. Posted: November 18, 2018In:

    Working for the dole at a front for a criminal syndicate, a young man with dreams to box in the Sydney Olympics has an altercation with a client at work — capturing the eyes of the Owner who offers him a more profitable career… Clashing with his values and dreams.

    giannisggeorgiou Samurai

    Plus, the logline is tooooooo long. Edit, edit, edit! Cut the details out and stick to the things we need to know: character, event, action. See the?Our Formula page.

    Plus, the logline is tooooooo long. Edit, edit, edit! Cut the details out and stick to the things we need to know: character, event, action. See the?Our Formula page.

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  2. Posted: October 25, 2018In:

    A Secret Service agent, must kill the President to save the Presidency. After years in exile, he must help save his estranged daughter, the newest President, when she is taken hostage.

    giannisggeorgiou Samurai

    So, wait, must he kill his daughter? Or did he kill the previous president, which got him exiled? (And not inprisoned?) Please clarify. I agree with all of the comments above.

    So, wait, must he kill his daughter? Or did he kill the previous president, which got him exiled? (And not inprisoned?)

    Please clarify. I agree with all of the comments above.

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  3. Posted: October 23, 2018In:

    A young boy with autism goes to Sicily on vacation and falls in love with a girl.

    giannisggeorgiou Samurai

    Is it a story of a boy loving a girl, while the girl loves back or not? Try the formula: When an autistic American teenager falls in love with an Italian girl, he must...

    Is it a story of a boy loving a girl, while the girl loves back or not?

    Try the formula:

    When an autistic American teenager falls in love with an Italian girl, he must…

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