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When Heaven accidentally causes an army of demons to be unleashed on the town of Oceanview, God is forced to visit Earth with disastrous results. Title: God Just Wanted To Play Golf
By reading the logline, I was not certain about: 1. Whether God is supposed to be the main character and 2. The "disastrous results." 1. If God is the MC, which God are we talking about? Give Him (or Her?) a personality; a flaw. Richiev suggests Him being human upon arrival to Earth. (It reminds meRead more
By reading the logline, I was not certain about:
1. Whether God is supposed to be the main character and
2. The “disastrous results.”
1.
If God is the MC, which God are we talking about? Give Him (or Her?) a personality; a flaw. Richiev suggests Him being human upon arrival to Earth. (It reminds me od Last Action Hero’s Arnie, who discovers that he can’t punch through glass in the real world without getting hurt.
2.
See lessYou need to define the “disastrous results.” More specifically, you need to define the Action that drives the movie. If the horde of demons is the antagonism, what must God DO, for an hour or so of the Second Act?
When her older husband dies of viagra overdose, leaving her cuffed on the bed frame, a sexually frustrated woman must break free or die alone in their isolated lake house.
I am not particularly crazy with "sexually frustrated woman." A big revelation in the movie is her memory that she was abused by her father. Also, the whole cuffs on the bed is a rape fantasy her husband puts her through, without her will, so should I say "sexually abused woman?"
I am not particularly crazy with “sexually frustrated woman.” A big revelation in the movie is her memory that she was abused by her father. Also, the whole cuffs on the bed is a rape fantasy her husband puts her through, without her will, so should I say “sexually abused woman?”
See lessDuring an extraction, the head of a Special Forces unit vanishes overnight, the second-in-command leads an impromptu search and rescue in which the unit are attacked by an adversary from an ancient and forgotten age.
If I may: please, PLEASE, after taking feedback, do not alter the logline itself, but post each new version (perhaps with a new number) separately. I have lost the whole journey of the logline's transformation and it's a shame.
If I may: please, PLEASE, after taking feedback, do not alter the logline itself, but post each new version (perhaps with a new number) separately. I have lost the whole journey of the logline’s transformation and it’s a shame.
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