1. Posted: March 14, 2015In:

    An estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried

    Gabor Penpusher

    Hi dpg, got your points! the couple decides for a "normal" counseling retreat service, e.g. http://guidedoc.com/the-8-best-marriage-counseling-retreats-in-the-us . They agree to meet with the service provider at a nice excursion place inside the forest, so they decide to hike there. Their only expecRead more

    Hi dpg, got your points!

    the couple decides for a “normal” counseling retreat service, e.g. http://guidedoc.com/the-8-best-marriage-counseling-retreats-in-the-us . They agree to meet with the service provider at a nice excursion place inside the forest, so they decide to hike there.

    Their only expectation is to give their relationship a last chance by attending services like the ones in the link above. With an “I don’t think this would help, but let’s give a last try” attitude.

    Meeting the psycho and its dog is absolutely unintended! He is definitely not part of the service they signed up for. They rather fall in his trap. In their captivity this guy is doing things to them they don’t like, so this is one side of what I mean by facing their nightmares. On the other hand, they will have to be honest towards each other at last, which is another kind of nightmare that an alienated couple will have to go through…

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  2. Posted: March 14, 2015In:

    An estranged couple decides for a last-chance counseling retreat in a forest just to meet a therapist who reveals their secrets that should rather have remained buried

    Gabor Penpusher

    Thanks guys, this is really exciting! Small update: dpg - added last chance, instead intensive. I like your questions, but I am not sure if I should give away all that information in the logline. I envision a movie that pulls in the audience (or a potential studio) becuase of these questions (audienRead more

    Thanks guys, this is really exciting! Small update:

    dpg – added last chance, instead intensive. I like your questions, but I am not sure if I should give away all that information in the logline. I envision a movie that pulls in the audience (or a potential studio) becuase of these questions (audience to watch the movie, producer to read the synopsis). Not sure if you can agree with this view?

    Rutger, by don’t give away the end of the story you mean I shouldn’t use “turns into their worst nightmares”?

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  3. Posted: March 15, 2015In:

    When an out spoken video gamer returns home to care for her injured father. She must enter into and win a video game tournament to keep her fathers farm.

    Gabor Penpusher

    Hi Houston, I very much like the idea of online gaming coming into the movies (however this is just an opinion, that could result in one ticket at the box office - but at least one! :-), it is amazing to know that there are a lot of people watching online WoW and other world championships, from a prRead more

    Hi Houston,

    I very much like the idea of online gaming coming into the movies (however this is just an opinion, that could result in one ticket at the box office – but at least one! :-), it is amazing to know that there are a lot of people watching online WoW and other world championships, from a producer’s POV I think that makes an audience to rely on. So I am positive on the basics!

    On the logline:
    – I would change outspoken to a more meaningful expression in this context, a synonim for careless/lazy/doesn’t-care-much attitude, or run-away…
    – Probably the father’s injury could somehow be pushed to more extreme, like dying father. Might be his last wish for the girl to come home
    – Finally the stake could be higher (OK, I know this is content), e.g. the treatment costs for the father that could save his life

    Something like:

    Run-away Sarah became a gamer abroad against her father’s will. Now she comes home to see her dying father. Mother asks her to enter for a prized video game tournament to pay the most expensive treatment that could save his father’s life.

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