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When a troubled journalist returns to her birthplace to investigate the mysterious death of her childhood friend, she finds herself fighting for survival against the satanic cult now secretly controlling the town.
Sorry, I missed your updated logline post. I like this updated version better, though I still want to know more about the cult, and how she uncovers the cult. Are they linked to the murder of the friend? What will be achieved if they sacrifice the town? Also, 'She must destroy before they sacrificeRead more
Sorry, I missed your updated logline post. I like this updated version better, though I still want to know more about the cult, and how she uncovers the cult. Are they linked to the murder of the friend? What will be achieved if they sacrifice the town? Also, ‘She must destroy before they sacrifice the whole town’ could sound more exciting. You could use less-common words for ‘destroy’ and ‘sacrifice’, and try to make the second half of this updated logline sound more enticing.
See lessa sorrowing widower managed to kidnap a kid by giving away free ice cream after 10 years of his daughter?s death
lol This one made me laugh, I don't think that's your intention though. Just because the initial description of the man makes him sound like a nice, old-man, then you have that he gives kids ice cream for free all in order to steal one of them. I do like this aspect in your logline, except it needsRead more
lol This one made me laugh, I don’t think that’s your intention though. Just because the initial description of the man makes him sound like a nice, old-man, then you have that he gives kids ice cream for free all in order to steal one of them. I do like this aspect in your logline, except it needs to be made more sinister, to help make clear this is in the crime genre.
See lessThe true story of how a motley group of investors defied conventional wisdom and made billions of dollars in the stock market crash of 2008.
I would delete 'The true story', just because since it's based on a real event I feel many would assume this. I don't like the word 'motley' because the band 'Motley Crue' instantly pops in my head. I would explain in greater detail how they 'defied coventional wisdom', and would change '2008' to siRead more
I would delete ‘The true story’, just because since it’s based on a real event I feel many would assume this. I don’t like the word ‘motley’ because the band ‘Motley Crue’ instantly pops in my head. I would explain in greater detail how they ‘defied coventional wisdom’, and would change ‘2008’ to simply ”08′.
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