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A vampire and vampire slayer living as roommates, hiding their identity, are secretly trying to kill each other, but fall in love in the process.
What do you guys think of this one? I thought this one was too wordy so that's why I was trying to cut it down. Also, I don't think you're supposed to put the ages of characters in your logline. I've never seen a logline with ages of the characters. "After a lazy, lade back vampire runs out of bodyRead more
What do you guys think of this one? I thought this one was too wordy so that’s why I was trying to cut it down. Also, I don’t think you’re supposed to put the ages of characters in your logline. I’ve never seen a logline with ages of the characters.
“After a lazy, lade back vampire runs out of body parts to suck blood out from his last female roommate, he finds a new sweet, innocent looking female roommate for a fresh kill, except she is a vampire slayer in training who must kill her first vampire as a final test, but when unnatural feelings grow for each other, things get complicated.”
See lessA drug addict and a businessman come together through their joint love of music, and become increasingly dependant on each other.
I think that sounds better. It peeks my interest now. I think adding that their mediocre lives crumble around them works. But you could still leave in a drug addict and a businessman, instead of two people. At least we would know more about the characters from their occupation. I think it's definiteRead more
I think that sounds better. It peeks my interest now. I think adding that their mediocre lives crumble around them works. But you could still leave in a drug addict and a businessman, instead of two people. At least we would know more about the characters from their occupation.
I think it’s definitely an improvement so great job! I’m curious to know what others think.
See lessA drug addict and a businessman come together through their joint love of music, and become increasingly dependant on each other.
What me and Nir Shelter are both saying though is that you need to possibly put more info in your logline. What hold ups do they have? That could be presented in the logline.
What me and Nir Shelter are both saying though is that you need to possibly put more info in your logline. What hold ups do they have? That could be presented in the logline.
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