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For single mother Beth, raising teenage twins & juggling a career just got medieval when into her world lands a baby dragon named George.
I agree with sharkeatingman. There is something intriguing in your logline already. Maybe you could reword it a little differently but if I read this as a logline on television, I would give it a shot. The tone is clear as well. I got the impression this would be a family comedy. I do agree that I dRead more
I agree with sharkeatingman. There is something intriguing in your logline already. Maybe you could reword it a little differently but if I read this as a logline on television, I would give it a shot. The tone is clear as well. I got the impression this would be a family comedy.
I do agree that I don’t think we need to know the dragons name n your loglne. It’s not important. I also think putting the paleontologist in your logline would be very important. What’s stopping the characters from hiding the dragon? Without the description below the logline, I wouldn’t know who the antagonist is.
“A single mother’s life suddenly gets medieval when she and her family must hide a dragon from a paleontologist who wishes to harm the creature for fame and glory.”
Just playing around with your logline. I don’t think we need to know that she has two teenage daughters either. I think just knowing she is a single working mother is enough. Hope my opinions help.
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I think you have the set up down and set the tone well but what are the characters goals? Try to incorporate the protagonists goals in this. This could be an interesting romantic drama but why are they dependent on each other? I guess it's a little vague right now. Hope this helps.
I think you have the set up down and set the tone well but what are the characters goals? Try to incorporate the protagonists goals in this. This could be an interesting romantic drama but why are they dependent on each other? I guess it’s a little vague right now. Hope this helps.
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I think overall this is working well. It sounds like it could be fun and exciting. I guess if you're going to be nitpicky, using the word sex three times maybe can be cut a little.
I think overall this is working well. It sounds like it could be fun and exciting. I guess if you’re going to be nitpicky, using the word sex three times maybe can be cut a little.
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