1. Posted: December 30, 2015In:

    A young couple become intruders in their own home after they discover it’s being shared by a couple who look exactly like them.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Adamu95 and dpg, it's nice to be challenged to improve. So on that note, here's my attempt to elaborate/differentiate: "A young couple are on the verge of losing their minds after they fail to convince the police that their home has been invaded by another couple who look exactly like them". "

    Adamu95 and dpg, it’s nice to be challenged to improve. So on that note, here’s my attempt to elaborate/differentiate:

    “A young couple are on the verge of losing their minds after they fail to convince the police that their home has been invaded by another couple who look exactly like them”.

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  2. Posted: December 30, 2015In:

    A young couple become intruders in their own home after they discover it’s being shared by a couple who look exactly like them.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Thanks for your insightful comments. I think the genre differentiates it. It's Science Fiction along the lines of 'Primer' and 'Coherence' and the logline is for a short film. So, it's basically setup and climax. The climax is a 'Twilight Zone' style payoff that resolves the mystery of the doubles.Read more

    Thanks for your insightful comments. I think the genre differentiates it. It’s Science Fiction along the lines of ‘Primer’ and ‘Coherence’ and the logline is for a short film. So, it’s basically setup and climax. The climax is a ‘Twilight Zone’ style payoff that resolves the mystery of the doubles. So, I can only include the setup in the logline.

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  3. Posted: December 31, 2015In:

    Disillusioned with God and the modern world, an immortal man suffering from an existential crisis attempts to immanentize the eschaton- bring heaven on Earth. He resorts to murder and underhandedness as means to justify his end. Title: Aeturnum

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    These are thematic ideas that need to be dramatized. Remember, a screenplay is not a treatise.

    These are thematic ideas that need to be dramatized. Remember, a screenplay is not a treatise.

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