1. Posted: February 14, 2015In:

    The last Scribe in a technology ruled false utopian future must unite with an android that contains the entirety of human history, before the ruling corporation can enact their final technological control onto the masses.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    I think this logline needs a personal/emotional struggle that's tied into the technology.

    I think this logline needs a personal/emotional struggle that’s tied into the technology.

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    To fulfill a lifetime dream a terminally ill man heads to the Grand Canyon. On the way he meets a homeless man and helps him reunite with his estranged family instead of finishing his trip.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    I'm guessing you're holding back details for the sake of brevity in which case it's better to start long and give a better sense of the setup and key developments in Act 2 which commentators can help strip down to its core values.

    I’m guessing you’re holding back details for the sake of brevity in which case it’s better to start long and give a better sense of the setup and key developments in Act 2 which commentators can help strip down to its core values.

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  3. Posted: February 14, 2015In:

    To fulfill a lifetime dream a terminally ill man heads to the Grand Canyon. On the way he meets a homeless man and helps him reunite with his estranged family instead of finishing his trip.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    I'm guessing you're holding back details for the sake of brevity in which case it's better to start long and give a better sense of the setup and key developments in Act 2 which commentators can help strip down to its core values.

    I’m guessing you’re holding back details for the sake of brevity in which case it’s better to start long and give a better sense of the setup and key developments in Act 2 which commentators can help strip down to its core values.

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