1. Posted: June 1, 2013In:

    Espionage is the weapon of choice, for husband and wife inventors of an algorithm that speeds up the design of life-saving drugs and the multinational corporation determined to suppress it.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Thanks 10PTT. I really appreciate your analysis and comments. And I've tried to revise the logline with all of that in mind. Espionage is the weapon of choice: for clashing husband and wife inventors of a lucrative new industrial process and the global corporation determined to bury technology thatRead more

    Thanks 10PTT. I really appreciate your analysis and comments. And I’ve tried to revise the logline with all of that in mind.

    Espionage is the weapon of choice: for clashing husband and wife inventors of a lucrative new industrial process and the global corporation determined to bury technology that could save millions of lives.

    I prefer to use the word espionage because it defines the sub-genre for readers and
    people – in my mind – immediately think of deception, betrayal, etc – which is what the story is all about.

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  2. Posted: May 30, 2013In:

    When a decorated cop discovers his wife is dying of cancer he sets out to rob a bank to give her the holiday of a lifetime.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Phew!!!! You've got me all hot and bothered!

    Phew!!!! You’ve got me all hot and bothered!

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  3. Posted: May 31, 2013In:

    After accusing a powerful British Financial titan of rape, a successful business woman must decide whether to save her fledgling firm or regain the life she lost.

    kbfilmworks Samurai

    Forgot to mention: I don't think making a decision is enough to drive the script. It might be a good idea to review your approach to your logline. Hope this helps.

    Forgot to mention: I don’t think making a decision is enough to drive the script. It might be a good idea to review your approach to your logline. Hope this helps.

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