1. Posted: September 18, 2012In:

    Courtroom thriller set in the 90's. A young lawyer's family is put at risk when a persistent journalist convinces the World that his client on a manslaughter charge may be hiding a horrific identity, an identity that strikes fear into everybody.

    Kriss Tolliday

    Thanks for the comments. I have had another attempt at it so search A Dirt Of Hell and see if I have made it any better. Thanks again guys much appreciated.

    Thanks for the comments. I have had another attempt at it so search A Dirt Of Hell and see if I have made it any better. Thanks again guys much appreciated.

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  2. Posted: September 21, 2012In:

    A flamboyantly ghetto man must care for his rich estranged grandmother as a live-in in her haunted house in this horror genre spoof.

    Kriss Tolliday

    I understood the log line but don't feel like it really gripped me enough to want to see the film. The premise works but I would have to agree with Richiev in that it doesn't really give us a definitive obstacle at the minute. An interesting idea though especially with The Cabin In The Woods recentlRead more

    I understood the log line but don’t feel like it really gripped me enough to want to see the film. The premise works but I would have to agree with Richiev in that it doesn’t really give us a definitive obstacle at the minute.

    An interesting idea though especially with The Cabin In The Woods recently starting this horror spoof faze.

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  3. Posted: September 19, 2012In:

    President Hauter has to choose ? use illegal methods to ensure continued peace and stability in her region, or stand by and allow women and infants? lives be endangered. After the Zero Birth Years, scientists designed artificial wombs and solved the crisis of global infertility. Now a company has developed hormonal treatments that have jolted five women into fertility and potential motherhood. And they're running a competition to see if one of them can survive pregnancy and childbirth.

    Kriss Tolliday

    I think all the comments so far have a good point. The log line is far too long and people may not read it all as it looks a lot on the page. I wander if you even need the opening line or two and instead find a way to push them into one and and get to the main story of the film almost immediately. HRead more

    I think all the comments so far have a good point. The log line is far too long and people may not read it all as it looks a lot on the page. I wander if you even need the opening line or two and instead find a way to push them into one and and get to the main story of the film almost immediately.

    Hope this helps.

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