1. Posted: April 27, 2017In:

    When her older sister disappears with a mysterious stranger, a loner teen and her newly sober mother embark on a precarious road trip to find her.

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    I like this. Perhaps some more intriguing terms could be used to describe the 'loner teen' who I assume is the protagonist. Also not really sure who is the antagonist, the stranger or the mother - I'm assuming the mother, and the story is focused on the dysfunctional relationship between the two (soRead more

    I like this.

    Perhaps some more intriguing terms could be used to describe the ‘loner teen’ who I assume is the protagonist. Also not really sure who is the antagonist, the stranger or the mother – I’m assuming the mother, and the story is focused on the dysfunctional relationship between the two (so, if I’m wrong, then something needs fixing).

    I’m curious to know why the trip is precarious, and how does the teen get along with her mother, but I guess those are the questions that I should be reading the script/watching the movie to find out. Yeah, I’d be tempted to watch this if it came up as a viewing option somewhere.

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  2. Posted: April 26, 2017In:

    A soldier returns home with a Bronze Star, a Purple Heart, and a desire to become a professional high stakes poker player, believing it is a safer lifestyle. So she thought.

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    I think the "Bronze Star, a Purple Heart..." is nice, but too much detail unless you can make it relevant to poker playing. Secondly, what is the tangible threat? I think you need to say what in the 'lifestyle' is such a danger so we can connect.

    I think the “Bronze Star, a Purple Heart…” is nice, but too much detail unless you can make it relevant to poker playing.

    Secondly, what is the tangible threat? I think you need to say what in the ‘lifestyle’ is such a danger so we can connect.

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  3. Posted: March 13, 2017In:

    When his vibrant friend turns seriously ill during a road trip, and anxious recluse must get her home through a strange and threatening world.

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    That's pretty close to the story. She's in the last days, but is desperate to make every last moment count. She convinces her friend, against his fears, to take her on one last trip.? Kinda had to get all that in under twenty-five words. I've tried to focus on how this is different from other kindsRead more

    That’s pretty close to the story. She’s in the last days, but is desperate to make every last moment count. She convinces her friend, against his fears, to take her on one last trip.? Kinda had to get all that in under twenty-five words. I’ve tried to focus on how this is different from other kinds of cancer stories. This is the story of Sam, the anxious recluse, and how he finds himself in his worst-case scenario and has to somehow cope. It’s his arc, and he is the one who changes as he faces off with his friend, who is upbeat and positive despite her imminent death.

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