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An agoraphobic writer must revisit her dark past, and battle a menacing presence, in order to survive the night, and reach the most important deadline of her life.
I like this. Intriguing. But, I have to agree with Sadie. I feel the menacing presence needs to be something more concrete. If the menacing presence is something more psychological that is hard to define,? (and I well understand the logline struggle in this scenario), I'd try and pick the most tangiRead more
I like this. Intriguing.
But, I have to agree with Sadie. I feel the menacing presence needs to be something more concrete.
If the menacing presence is something more psychological that is hard to define,? (and I well understand the logline struggle in this scenario), I’d try and pick the most tangible and vivid element.
See lessWhen two wholesome brothers inherit a strip club they must not only overcome their own prejudices to see it succeed, but also defend it when the upright community decides to drive it out of business
In that case, this works better: "Two wholesome brothers invest everything into moving and managing their deceased uncle?s hotel, only to discover it is really a strip club. They must not only overcome their own prejudices to see it succeed, but also defend it when the upright community strive to drRead more
In that case, this works better:
“Two wholesome brothers invest everything into moving and managing their deceased uncle?s hotel, only to discover it is really a strip club. They must not only overcome their own prejudices to see it succeed, but also defend it when the upright community strive to drive it out of business.”
However, this really blows out my word count.
See lessThirty five year old toy designer John who hates kids gets a chance to design toys for one of the best toy manufacturing company under the super vision of four year old Sara.
Sounds like a lot of fun. Although I feel a need to know what is the main obstacle? Is Sara antagonistic to him? Does he fight his own inner demons regarding hating kids? Is he trying to hide his history of hating kids from his employer and somebody is trying to expose him? Not sure where the story'Read more
Sounds like a lot of fun. Although I feel a need to know what is the main obstacle? Is Sara antagonistic to him? Does he fight his own inner demons regarding hating kids? Is he trying to hide his history of hating kids from his employer and somebody is trying to expose him? Not sure where the story’s going to go after the set up.
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