1. Posted: October 4, 2013In:

    Vibrant animals, big and small roamed over the grey world of Land, Sea and air, however time is running out.

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    Joey, this isn't really a logline. Who is the main character? The protagonist? What is the conflict other than extinction? Since extinction can take decades, how is the conflict illustrated? Is this an animated movie. A documentary? Not sure what you are going for here. Sorry.

    Joey, this isn’t really a logline. Who is the main character? The protagonist? What is the conflict other than extinction? Since extinction can take decades, how is the conflict illustrated? Is this an animated movie. A documentary?

    Not sure what you are going for here. Sorry.

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  2. Posted: October 2, 2013In:

    After having searched around the world for the perfect girl, a young man finds just what he?s been looking for in his own small town where a high school friend has always been waiting for him.

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    Good comments. Food for thought to develop this into a stronger concept. This was envisioned as a character piece. His conflict is internal believing that happiness is out there somewhere when in fact in can sometimes be right in front of you. The conflict throughout the film is that even though heRead more

    Good comments. Food for thought to develop this into a stronger concept.

    This was envisioned as a character piece. His conflict is internal believing that happiness is out there somewhere when in fact in can sometimes be right in front of you. The conflict throughout the film is that even though he returns home, he still thinks “it” is out there and he just needs to find it. He is blind to what is right in front of him.

    Thanks for the notes. Love the T.S. Eliot quote!

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  3. Posted: October 2, 2013In:

    When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

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    DPG, by recasting as championship racers you have completely missed the point of where the conflict comes in and why the audience should be invested. If the father and son are Nikki Lauder and James Hunt of off-road then they are just like all of the other racers like you said, BUT, if the two are nRead more

    DPG, by recasting as championship racers you have completely missed the point of where the conflict comes in and why the audience should be invested. If the father and son are Nikki Lauder and James Hunt of off-road then they are just like all of the other racers like you said, BUT, if the two are novices we have a fish-out-of-water story where they are out of their element by racing a 500 hundred mile trek through treacherous desert in Mexico. Now you have the makings for a strong conflict.

    The father and son not only have an arc of learning to survive and becoming stronger because of it, but their relationship is enhanced because they must work together.

    Thanks for all of the comments! I appreciate workshopping ideas.

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