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When a young boy would rather live in his daydreams than face the harsh truth of his bullied school boy existence, his teacher and parents must rescue him before he is lost forever.
Valid question Richiev. Either would make a fascinating story. If it is the boy then you could have fun visiting the imaginary worlds almost like "The Imaginarium of Doctor Parnassuss." I think I like this better than from the parents perspective, which could become a more serious film. The child chRead more
Valid question Richiev. Either would make a fascinating story. If it is the boy then you could have fun visiting the imaginary worlds almost like “The Imaginarium of Doctor Parnassuss.” I think I like this better than from the parents perspective, which could become a more serious film. The child character has more latitude to work with since he is making a conscious decision to avoid reality.
See less80 year old Rachel wakes up in the spirit world and finds out she is dead. It was entirely different what she had thought of life after death and to her shock there was only 80 minutes left to rebirth. Rachel needs to complete a task which will decide her karma in her newborn life. The challenge in completing the task – she is getting younger minute by minute in the spirit world and will take rebirth as a newborn in 80 minutes. She needs to use the time appropriately to achieve the task, as in the early minutes and in the end ones, she will either be too old or too young for the task and she has to complete the task while her coffin is buried in the funeral. Will she succeed or not, time will tell.
That is the point though, you have to be able to condense your story into the fewest number of words to get to the heart of it. You have a lot of extra details that are not required for a logline. If you can't you may not have a focused enough story. How about this? "When an old woman wakes up in thRead more
That is the point though, you have to be able to condense your story into the fewest number of words to get to the heart of it. You have a lot of extra details that are not required for a logline. If you can’t you may not have a focused enough story. How about this?
See less“When an old woman wakes up in the spirit world and realizes she has died and only has 80 minutes until she is reborn to correct her karma, she must complete a series of tasks or risk a new life of struggle and trials.”
44 words and says the same thing.
A family nurses an injured Angel that crashes onto their summer cottage roof back to health, hiding their foreign guest’s wings from curious neighbors until what injured the Angel returns.
Interesting. Sounds a bit like the John Travolta movie, "Michael." You might consider tightening this up a bit and adding a conflict. Where is the tension? Is someone, natural or supernatural hunting the angel? There needs to be tension and conflict to carry you through three acts. How about, "A vacRead more
Interesting. Sounds a bit like the John Travolta movie, “Michael.” You might consider tightening this up a bit and adding a conflict. Where is the tension? Is someone, natural or supernatural hunting the angel? There needs to be tension and conflict to carry you through three acts.
See lessHow about, “A vacationing family must nurse back to health an injured Angel that crashes onto the roof of their cottage, while hiding him from snooping neighbors and forces of darkness that threaten to destroy the angel and mankind, until he regains his strength and power.”
Good start and good luck.