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When a Russian submarine sailed from Murmansk into the Cuban Missile Crisis, with a nuclear torpedo, Vasili Arkhipov, survivor of the K-19 nuclear disaster, battled PTSD and prevented the captain from destroying the civilized world on the most dangerous day of human history.
"battled PTSD" - is there a more visual way to describe what happened? To me, battling PTSD happens largely inside someone's head. I could be wrong having very little experience of PTSD.The true story of Vasili Arkihipov, who, when his captain is given the order to fire a nuclear torpedo during theRead more
“battled PTSD” – is there a more visual way to describe what happened? To me, battling PTSD happens largely inside someone’s head. I could be wrong having very little experience of PTSD.
The true story of Vasili Arkihipov, who, when his captain is given the order to fire a nuclear torpedo during the Cuban Missile Crisis, risks execution for insubordination by trying to prevent the destruction of the civilised world.
I have no idea whether he risked execution so amend as necessary. I don’t think you need a lot of the details of the story to still get the bulk of the story across – his name suggests that he’s Russian. I’m not sure you even need to state he survived the K-19 nuclear disaster… although I could very (very) easily be swayed on this. To me the most important components to get across are the fact that it’s a true story and that one man single handedly prevented nuclear war.
I’m going to find the book on amazon now as it sounds great!
See lessAn emotionally & physically abused teen witnesses the murder of his family, his abuser responsible. ?Now an adult, he along with his K9 enact revenge on the entire family responsible, destroying their?family business of drugs and prostitution.?
As Nir suggested, the problem with the negative goal, particularly if he ends up taking revenge on the entire family (not just the one person who murdered his family), is that the audience might struggle to get behind him. What's making him any better than the guy who killed his family? Is he a cop?Read more
As Nir suggested, the problem with the negative goal, particularly if he ends up taking revenge on the entire family (not just the one person who murdered his family), is that the audience might struggle to get behind him. What’s making him any better than the guy who killed his family?
Is he a cop? Using K9 (as opposed to canine) suggests a law enforcement dog such as a German Shepherd. This should be clarified ALTHOUGH the dog seems to have no bearing on the story based on this logline so I see no reason to include it. If you took this element out of the story and everything still starts and finishes the same way then take it out of the logline.
What sort of adult is this guy now? Give us a characteristic and/or a profession. That’ll tell us a bit about who he is now.
See lessStephanie has just fallen in with the bad crowd at school. When her new slacker friends start dying in horrific ?accidents,? Stephanie is only one who thinks there is a connection. She must figure it out before it?s too late, but what if this is all for her own good?
Agree with all previous comments. As Nir pointed out, you don't need to include names. It's more important to give her a defining characteristic. This is usually something that forms the basis for her character arc - if you described her as depressed then by the end of the film she finds happiness.Read more
Agree with all previous comments.
As Nir pointed out, you don’t need to include names. It’s more important to give her a defining characteristic. This is usually something that forms the basis for her character arc – if you described her as depressed then by the end of the film she finds happiness.
Imagine someone “figuring out” something on screen. Chances are it would be a very small, very subtle bit of acting. That’s it. So make the goal something bigger. As Nir said – it should be to stop the murders but you can suggest that there’s a mystery involved – “she must follow the clues to unmask the killer before somebody else dies”.
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