What matters? He only has one patient? Isn’t it his job to be aware of such things even without telepathy? Why is it important that he’s just gained this ability? What is the main focus of the story? What’s at stake for him? How does his life change due to this event? Are there issues only with your logline or the whole story?

You keep making it longer by adding in descriptive phrases and vague notions of unclear actions?I’m gonna go back to my initial suggestion for how to summarize the major events and main character. You can change around certain words or details, but the idea is to tell us only what we absolutely need to know to have a basic understanding of the story’s main concepts. If it’s more than 25-30 words you’re probably saying too much.

Let me put it this way: even a terribly boring or ridiculous idea can be summed up in a simple sentence. “An alcoholic dentist must knit a sweater before sunrise or a psychotic elf will turn his brain to pudding.” This would make a really stupid movie, but do you have any questions about what’s happening or why? You know the main character and a little something about him, you know his main goal, you know the stakes if he fails, and you know the antagonist. That’s all you need. A synopsis would contain more plot detail, such as how this all started, the successes and setbacks he encounters while knitting, how it all turns out?but a logline only needs the very basics, and it must be simple & clear. Don’t get fancy with it. An interesting story sells itself; all you have to do tell us what that story is.