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An ambitious woman takes over her uncle?s struggling restaurant, determined to bring the business back to life. When the staff that don?t meet Wendy?s standards begin to disappear, the remaining employees start to question just how dedicated to her job their new manager might be. You?d better hope you?re on next week?s roster.
Hey Fliss If Wendy is killing innocent people, she becomes a negative character. If there are two other main characters trying to stop the killing, or figure out what is happening to their co workers, they are positive characters. The audience will find it hard to empathize with a negative characterRead more
Hey Fliss
If Wendy is killing innocent people, she becomes a negative character. If there are two other main characters trying to stop the killing, or figure out what is happening to their co workers, they are positive characters.
The audience will find it hard to empathize with a negative character and easy to empathize with the positive ones. I suspect your plot would also be more interesting with an element of mystery introduced by the fact the main characters don’t know what is actually happening.
Perhaps best to re draft the logline from the point of view of the character or characters that are trying to stop the killer.
Hope this helps.
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Agreed with DPG, not sure how this will fare with such a "seen it before" type story.Concept aside, the logline doesn't fulfill it's primary function - to describe a plot. In order to describe a plot a logline needs to convey specific details about the story, such as; the main character's flaw, herRead more
Agreed with DPG, not sure how this will fare with such a “seen it before” type story.
Concept aside, the logline doesn’t fulfill it’s primary function – to describe a plot. In order to describe a plot a logline needs to convey specific details about the story, such as; the main character’s flaw, her goal and inciting incident.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen the daughter of a corrupt Mexican police chef of Iguala is kidnapped, he goes om a murderous rampage while unwillingly helped by a masked female vigilante who brutally revenges the endless killings of Mexican favela girls.
There are a few grammar and spelling errors that throw off the reader best to double check these for the next draft.It seems obvious to me that the police chief can't be the protagonist as he is a despicable character (according to your second post) and as such the audience will not develop empathyRead more
There are a few grammar and spelling errors that throw off the reader best to double check these for the next draft.
It seems obvious to me that the police chief can’t be the protagonist as he is a despicable character (according to your second post) and as such the audience will not develop empathy with him.
The daughter sounds like the best candidate for being the protagonist so best to re-draft the logline from her point of view. The masked vigilante seems redundant as she is unrelated to the plot at hand (from the daughter’s perspective) if the plot is that the daughter wants to bring her father to justice that is.
The inciting incident could be the father killing the daughter’s best friend and that is what forces her into action then the goal will be her getting her father arrested.
Hope this helps.
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