Neer Shelter

Legend · 39,985 points

23 loglines
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After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

June 29, 2020
When a machete-wielding crew chases a young gang member, he’s forced to drive incognito with a Hassidic geriatric to complete a drug run.

February 24, 2020
After a machete wielding gang murder his partner, a vengeful drug mule hides with a geriatric cripple in his station wagon, to chase and kill the psychotic crew.

February 20, 2020
A question about The Departed and Donnie Brasco

November 8, 2019
After three friends gain super-powers from a crashed alien ship, two of them must stop the third from destroying the city.

August 7, 2018
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After his prizefighter abandons him, an oldfashioned trainer takes on a stubborn woman to train her for a championship challenge.

July 26, 2018
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After an attempt on his father’s life, a by-the-book Marine captain must kill his father’s rivals and become head of his own crime family to protect those he loves.

July 16, 2017
Dear fellow writers, I wanted to share with you the good news about the release of my latest little project – a comedy web series titled God’s 17. You can check out our latest episode on our website: www.gods17.com

May 29, 2017
After his pregnant wife’s cancer medication gets pulled from the public health system, a hot-headed Aboriginal amateur boxer must steal enough to keep her alive until the birth.

July 21, 2016
After his terminally ill and clinically dead bitch of a wife miraculously revives her self, a depressed man must find a way to free himself of his life long commitment.

July 18, 2016

on When a sentient video game character falls in love with the real-life player, she must get rid of the other characters to gain the player’s affections, even if that means rewriting the game script.

This is cool! It's like a reveres Her, where the AI is the main character - It's a digi-girl meets boy love story. The premise needs more clarity though. What kind of game? First-person shooter? Battle royal? A quest? Lastly,…
on A righteous but gullible whistle-blower must obtain evidence her intimidating boss is a murderous monster before he catches on and takes sadistic steps to silence her for good.

I can only assume that she MUST obtain evidence now that he killed someone close to her... This is your inciting event, and it needs to be front and center in the logline - start with that. Secondly, what's the…
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

Thanks Savino.
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

Great suggestion, thanks for that. I was going for a coward needing to overcome his fears, but the theological angle could work too.
on After an actual demon possesses his wife during rehearsals for a stage version of The Exorcist, a spineless director must fight his demonic spouse to save the cast and crew.

This is a logline for a mockumentary (fake documentary) I'm currently writing - it's aimed at being a contained horror-comedy.
on In the depths of the depression, a small time con artist teams up with a seasoned pro to con $500,000 from a ruthless mobster to avenge the mobster’s murder of his mentor.

A great example, I'd make the wording a bit more "active sounding". For example: After a ruthless mobster kills his mentor, a small-time con artist takes revenge by teaming up with a seasoned pro to get half a million out…
on When evidence surfaces that an earlier generation of rebellious replicants has reproduced, a compliant next generation blade runner must find and ‘retire’ the child whose existence threatens human domination.

In order to not rely on the previous IP, this could also work: When a rebellious humanoid replicant gives birth, a genetics law enforcer must “retire” the child whose existence threatens humanity.
on In a post-civilization future, when an old project of reintroducing the human species on Earth is activated, a young 2.0 lonely human travels across the world, to be with others like him, just to end up disappointed with the new civilization being developed.

There are too many threads to this narrative for the logline to make sense. Describe one major event that motivates the human 2.0 to take action in pursuit of one clear goal.? Also, no need to name the character. Check…
on On a post-apocalyptic Earth with one side continually facing the sun, a gritty outsider and the metaphysical representation of his soul are forced into facing a new tyrannical regime that threatens the last remains of humanity.

Arguably, so are all the other survivors. What is it specifically about this dude that makes his struggle against the regime interesting, or rather more interesting than anyone else's?
on An? wheelchair-bound college girl must use her physical abilities and mental acumen to save her trapped friends from zombies who have surrounded their cottage.

It's a zombie flick with a twist - the main character is wheelchair-bound. As the genre is well established and chock full of tropes, the trick is to find an appropriate twist - a wheelchair may be enough, but it's…