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When amateur thieves break into his retirement home it’s upto an aging war veteran to kick their a**, risking his slip disk
This reads very well as a premise for a comedy.I would make the stakes higher, money is less relevant for these people than their memories.I would also expand the story to include more of the MC's retirement home commrads: After thieves break into their retirement village, a war veteran must lead aRead more
This reads very well as a premise for a comedy.
I would make the stakes higher, money is less relevant for these people than their memories.
I would also expand the story to include more of the MC’s retirement home commrads:
See lessAfter thieves break into their retirement village, a war veteran must lead a group of seniors, walking aids and all, to save their most cherished possessions.
An up-and-coming, LA-based actor is about to have his “big break” meeting with a star-director when he abruptly gets news from his casual-girlfriend, Rachel, that she’s pregnant, unplanned, which begins a twist-filled night that escalates to an explosive climax between Dae and Rachel.
This fails to create a stake that can carry a plot - terminate the pregnancy, end of story. Unless, of course, she refuses to terminate, in which case the onus is on her to raise the child without a father - it ain't going to be nice, but once again his career is unaffected Sorry for the cynicism buRead more
This fails to create a stake that can carry a plot – terminate the pregnancy, end of story.
Unless, of course, she refuses to terminate, in which case the onus is on her to raise the child without a father – it ain’t going to be nice, but once again his career is unaffected
Sorry for the cynicism but if they can’t afford to raise a child they should not have it – now day and age one has to be real.
There is no existential quest here, just a matter of prioritisation, career or family and he clearly prioritises his career over family – so, there, question answered…
I simply can’t see a plot that can sustain a feature in this.
See lessA paraplegic woman, with no memory what happened, investigates her own past and collides with a nocturnal vigilante who may hold the answers.
Cryptic descriptions don't serve the purpose of a logline. "...a nocturnal vigilante..." - is this a superhero? A normal Jo Shmo taking on some bad guys? The type of vigilante is critical and should be made clear - Batman is very different to Dexter... "...who may hold the answers..." - well does heRead more
Cryptic descriptions don’t serve the purpose of a logline. “…a nocturnal vigilante…” – is this a superhero? A normal Jo Shmo taking on some bad guys? The type of vigilante is critical and should be made clear – Batman is very different to Dexter…
“…who may hold the answers…” – well does he or she? Clarity and definitive descriptions will sell your concept more than vague or suggestive statements.
Other than that, what is the inciting incident and what is her goal? These are the most important elements in a logline and are currently missing – checkout the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar.
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