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After failing in bed with his love interest, a simple railroad dispatcher joins the resistance during World War II to prove his manhood
Not sure the first version cuts it for two reasons; Firstly, that event, like you said, happens late in the story and it relates more to his sense of self-worth than to his outer goal. Loglines are meant to describe the MC's plot in pursuit of the outer goal not their inner arch. The second reason iRead more
Not sure the first version cuts it for two reasons;
Firstly, that event, like you said, happens late in the story and it relates more to his sense of self-worth than to his outer goal. Loglines are meant to describe the MC’s plot in pursuit of the outer goal not their inner arch.
The second reason is that his shame is what made him do it as it predated the sex thing.
See less3 siblings set out on an adventure with their father?s friend, a professor, to find out what caused his disappearance and stop the power that could destroy humanity that he was looking for.
Good advice by Nicholas, and if he's right, I dare say you should have posted this under 'Examples'. Also, take note of the wording suggestions made on the thread - you should never underestimate the importance of clarity in a logline.
Good advice by Nicholas, and if he’s right, I dare say you should have posted this under ‘Examples’.
Also, take note of the wording suggestions made on the thread – you should never underestimate the importance of clarity in a logline.
See lessWhen an obsessive archaeologist accidentally releases a near-omnipotent demon, he must impersonate its boisterous, evil overlord to con it back into captivity.
If you're going with the omnipotent angle, may as well drop the "...near..." description - either he is omnipotent or he isn't. Though, I wouldn't make him omnipotent seeing as it would make the MC's goal almost impossible. The logic at the base of the concept is a very hard sell. Could the archeoloRead more
If you’re going with the omnipotent angle, may as well drop the “…near…” description – either he is omnipotent or he isn’t. Though, I wouldn’t make him omnipotent seeing as it would make the MC’s goal almost impossible.
The logic at the base of the concept is a very hard sell. Could the archeologist perhaps have found a mystical artifact that gives him powers? Otherwise, it doesn’t make much sense that a mortal can match up to a demi-god.
If not an artifact and sp[ecifal powers, what if the demon accidentally possesses the archeologist’s partner’s body and the archeologist has to pretend that he is the demon’s boss and has possessed the archeologist’s body? At least then you have a fairly even playing field in terms of looks – for every crazy demonic outburst the real possessed person does the archeologist has to match and top it if he’s to keep up the facade.
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