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After a well planned ambush on an armored truck carrying arms, a cop must find the people behind it before the weapons hit the streets.
Agreed with the above - this reads like a standard police procedural episode. Ultimately, it's about a guy doing his job but what you need is for it to be about a motivated guy doing something out of the ordinary. Could his brother or sister be involved in a gang and he knows that the weapons were tRead more
Agreed with the above – this reads like a standard police procedural episode. Ultimately, it’s about a guy doing his job but what you need is for it to be about a motivated guy doing something out of the ordinary. Could his brother or sister be involved in a gang and he knows that the weapons were taken by a rival gang?
See lessThe problem child of a family has to save his and his parents life when a hacker is keeping them hostage in their own house by using the smart home devices as weapons in order to let them die of thirst.
An interesting premise, but I find the logic a bit hard to accept. Why MUST this kid save them? What happened to the other members of the family that only he can save them all? Secondly, as a former problem child myself, I know that that description could very easily be misinterpreted as the familyRead more
An interesting premise, but I find the logic a bit hard to accept.
Why MUST this kid save them? What happened to the other members of the family that only he can save them all?
Secondly, as a former problem child myself, I know that that description could very easily be misinterpreted as the family simply not understanding him instead of it being a genuine character flaw. What if he were selfish or spoilt instead? This way he would have to change before he would be able to help the family.
See lessWhen her kingdom is sacked by the aztecs, a naive princess must use dangerous magic to protect the last of her people from the brutal jaguar warriors.
This logline works - it has all the major beats it needs and the story is clear enough.I urge you to push yourself and find a different/better flaw for the princes - 'naive' is so overused and passe a flaw for female characters. It comes across as more of a convenience flaw for the sake of giving heRead more
This logline works – it has all the major beats it needs and the story is clear enough.
I urge you to push yourself and find a different/better flaw for the princes – ‘naive’ is so overused and passe a flaw for female characters. It comes across as more of a convenience flaw for the sake of giving her one than a genuine flaw which relates to the story. If she was a selfish, arrogant or a stuck up A-holee, she would need to learn to care about other people. this way you can give her a real negative character flaw which would make her inner journey interesting.
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