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After a pandemic infects most of the world a young woman leads a group of survivors to safety as they are hunted by something that can control all the infected.
It reads like you?re trying to say Zombie apocalypse without saying Zombie apocalypse. True, by now it?s a cliche but at the same time, it still has an audience and most decision makers will see right through the wording. Best if you celebrate the genre instead of hiding it. You have an interestingRead more
It reads like you?re trying to say Zombie apocalypse without saying Zombie apocalypse. True, by now it?s a cliche but at the same time, it still has an audience and most decision makers will see right through the wording. Best if you celebrate the genre instead of hiding it. You have an interesting twist in that there is one person, or thing, that can control the infected population, use this to separate yours from the countless of other post-apocalypse stories out there.
See lessAfter a gang of gardners threaten to destroy the patch of forest he lives in, a nerdy ant must work with his insect rivals to build a 6ft tall robot to fend off the human menace and save their colonies.
I'll only add that the inciting incident needs a bit more urgency than the perception of a threat - best you describe the event that made it clear their colony is in danger. For example: After a greedy landscaper destroys a nearby patch of forest, a nerdy ant must enlist his insect rivals to build aRead more
I’ll only add that the inciting incident needs a bit more urgency than the perception of a threat – best you describe the event that made it clear their colony is in danger.
For example:
After a greedy landscaper destroys a nearby patch of forest, a nerdy ant must enlist his insect rivals to build a 6ft tall robot to fend off the menace and save their colony.
See lessAfter a gang of gardners threaten to destroy the patch of forest he lives in, a nerdy ant must work with his insect rivals to build a 6ft tall robot to fend off the human menace and save their colonies.
Agreed with Richiev, this reads mostly well.
Agreed with Richiev, this reads mostly well.
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