1. Posted: February 23, 2018In:

    Fueled by an encounter with a haunted house, a novice paranormal investigator battles the supernatural for those with nowhere else to turn with her reluctant best friend.

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    Agreed with the above comments. Is this a film or series?

    Agreed with the above comments.

    Is this a film or series?

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  2. Posted: February 23, 2018In:

    When their son?s death triggers his wife?s mental disorder, a man soon discovers his mistress will do anything to get the grieving mother out of the way, and he must choose: his wife or her alter.

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    'It was all in his or her head' like stories have been done to death (pardon the pun...), be very careful when pitching this. The whole, the wife is the mistress, last-minute twist will have very little impact now day and age. Stories are about action not choice making, what happens after he choosesRead more

    ‘It was all in his or her head’ like stories have been done to death (pardon the pun…), be very careful when pitching this. The whole, the wife is the mistress, last-minute twist will have very little impact now day and age.

    Stories are about action not choice making, what happens after he chooses? What does he do? What does the wife/mistress do?

    What kind of man is he? You need a better description than that for your main character in a logline.

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  3. Posted: February 23, 2018In:

    An outcast elephant who prefers to keep to himself becomes an unlikely hero when he unintentionally prevents a tragedy from occurring, but now he must learn how to become a leader.

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    You tell a story with details and need to do the same in a logline. "...prevents a tragedy..." - means very little in the context of a logline. What tragedy? What did he do? This tragedy, being the inciting incident, should happen as a result of someone or something else and you need to describe itRead more

    You tell a story with details and need to do the same in a logline.

    “…prevents a tragedy…” – means very little in the context of a logline. What tragedy? What did he do?

    This tragedy, being the inciting incident, should happen as a result of someone or something else and you need to describe it from the main character’s point of view, for example: After a poacher shoots half his herd, an outcast elephant kills the man and must lead the remaining herd members away to safety.

    Secondly, “…must learn how to become a leader…” – is his inner journey, but loglines are about the outer journey the MC takes to achieve a goal. What is his goal in the story?

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