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A man is held by unseen captives that thwart his every escape attempt. He discovers that they are his other personalities that have trying to stop his most violent personality escaping and killing again.
I prefer it if he dies (I write as I twist my evil looking mustache...) it gives him an element of sacrifice that redeems his character. However, for it not to feel hollow and labored, you'll need a second "real" character to benefit from the MC's sacrifice, otherwise, it was all for nothing. CouldRead more
I prefer it if he dies (I write as I twist my evil looking mustache…) it gives him an element of sacrifice that redeems his character. However, for it not to feel hollow and labored, you’ll need a second “real” character to benefit from the MC’s sacrifice, otherwise, it was all for nothing. Could there be a victim he was planning on killing and as a result of his own sacrifice the victim lives?
See lessWhen broke indie movie-maker and his friends heads into a desert to shot found footage horror movie, they stumble upon a real monster and have to fight to survive.
Agreed with Savinh0. What is unique about this monster or group of characters? More importantly, what will the filmmaker do to save their lives? Or in other words, what is the main action he will take to defeat the monster? Lastly comment (and very important for loglines); GRAMMAR...
Agreed with Savinh0.
What is unique about this monster or group of characters? More importantly, what will the filmmaker do to save their lives? Or in other words, what is the main action he will take to defeat the monster?
Lastly comment (and very important for loglines); GRAMMAR…
See lessA lonely computer programmer, looking for Mr. Right, must find a way to regain access to the empathetic AI, she inadvertently created, which the government has quarantined and designated a security risk.
Byron79, Loglines need to describe the plot in such a way that the sequence of events in the story play out logically and in the correct order in the reader's mind. In other words, a motivating event happens to a flawed main character who then takes action in pursuit of a goal. Or, in your case: AftRead more
Byron79,
Loglines need to describe the plot in such a way that the sequence of events in the story play out logically and in the correct order in the reader’s mind. In other words, a motivating event happens to a flawed main character who then takes action in pursuit of a goal.
Or, in your case:
After the government quarantines an AI she fell in love with, a lonely computer programmer must hack into a top-secret system to free the love of her life.
As a premise, it sounds good, but good isn’t enough – hacking is probably the most boring action to watch a character do. Why not make it so she has to steal an actual computer or HDD to save the AI from being destroyed? This way, you give the story a more cinematic action and a life and death stake. You could go further and give her a deadline – must save the AI within 7 days or else… give her a ticking time bomb.
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