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A young aid worker tormented by his dreams learns humanity has been manipulated for aeons. Only by accepting the past does he have a chance to save the future, humanity and the people he loves.
Agreed with the others on this thread. You'll be more likely to sell a script with clarity and detail than vague descriptions.
Agreed with the others on this thread. You’ll be more likely to sell a script with clarity and detail than vague descriptions.
See lessA young aid worker tormented by his dreams learns humanity has been manipulated for aeons. Only by accepting the past does he have a chance to save the future, humanity and the people he loves.
Happysnapper, Below are the comments I wrote for this same version? on another thread. The plot is vague and the story unclear. Below are a few questions that will pop into most decision makers minds. No need to answer them here in a reply to the thread, best you read other loglines and learn how otRead more
Happysnapper,
Below are the comments I wrote for this same version? on another thread.
The plot is vague and the story unclear.
Below are a few questions that will pop into most decision makers minds. No need to answer them here in a reply to the thread, best you read other loglines and learn how other writers use specific events and details to clearly describe their stories.
What does young aid worker mean? Is he 18 yo, 21yo, 25yo, 30yo?
How does him being young help or hinder his efforts?
How is him being an aid worker connected to him saving the world?
How does him being tormented by his dreams connect to the plot?
What does ??been manipulated for eons?? mean in practical terms?
What?s the worst that will happen should he fail?
What motivated him to save humanity? What specific event?
What does accepting the past mean in practical terms? What must he actually do?
What does save the future mean in practical terms? Who?s future?
Which goal does he care about most – save the world or save the people he loves?
She ran away from the sharecropping life she was born into, and pursued her dream of becoming a Blues musician. This is the story of Blues Legend: Memphis Minnie.
Is there something specific that made her need to run away?If nothing specific, is there anything you know about her life that you could embellish into the event??Lastly, can you define "...becoming a blues musician..."? In other words, it could help if the logline had a specific goal that will emboRead more
Is there something specific that made her need to run away?
If nothing specific, is there anything you know about her life that you could embellish into the event??
Lastly, can you define “…becoming a blues musician…”? In other words, it could help if the logline had a specific goal that will embody her as a blues musician. What was her break out gig that put her on the world stage?
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