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It is year 2022′ the world has been divided into two. Nikali, the healer , an outsider to the cycle, needs to break into the cycle to get the ancestors DNA and return it back to her land. But what she does with the DNA will forever change the course of humanity.
Nikki,Loglines have a few conventions that are easily learned and just as easily implemented. To get a better grasp on these conventions, I suggest you read through the 'Formula' tab on the top bar.To get you started, no need for names (unless a historical figure or pre existing IP), best to keep itRead more
Nikki,
Loglines have a few conventions that are easily learned and just as easily implemented. To get a better grasp on these conventions, I suggest you read through the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar.
To get you started, no need for names (unless a historical figure or pre existing IP), best to keep it 30 words or less. Good loglines describe a flawed main character, a powerfully motivating inciting incident, stakes and a compelling goal – all connected via a cause and effect relationship.
All the best,
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famous voodoo queen reincarnated with no recollection of who or what she is capable of. Her past lives assist her in discovering her true identity.
The first sentence lacks a preposition and makes little sense as a result, it also seems to be the first clause of a longer sentence. I think you meant: After a famous Voodoo queen is reincarnated, with no recollection of who or what she is, her past lives assist her in discovering her true identityRead more
The first sentence lacks a preposition and makes little sense as a result, it also seems to be the first clause of a longer sentence.
I think you meant:
After a famous Voodoo queen is reincarnated, with no recollection of who or what she is, her past lives assist her in discovering her true identity.
You allude to the fact that her goal is to discover her true identity, but I’m not sure that is made clear enough. Is she aware of the fact that she doesn’t know who she really is? Or is she under the impression that she is someone else, in other words, does she have a fake identity and fake memories?
Either way, the stakes are unclear. What is the worst thing that will happen should she not find out her true identity? At the same time, what’s the best thing that would happen should she find it out?
Lastly, and this is a small thing, I’m not sure what a voodoo queen is. What powers does being a voodoo queen give her?
There is also a logic flaw in the premise. After she is reincarnated, she becomes someone else and no longer the voodoo queen. Why must she remember who she was in a previous life?
See lessTo overcome her posttraumatic stress disorder, a withdrawn orphaned girl, who suffers from hallucinations, decides to confide in a stranger and move to him being unaware he hides a horrifying secret connected with her past.
What motivates her to overcome her PTSD at this point in time? Or, in other words, what is her inciting incident? Also, "...a horrifying secret..." is too vague a description for a logline - be specific, what is it about this guy that puts the girl at risk? Lastly, as Craig said, what is her goal? RRead more
What motivates her to overcome her PTSD at this point in time? Or, in other words, what is her inciting incident?
Also, “…a horrifying secret…” is too vague a description for a logline – be specific, what is it about this guy that puts the girl at risk?
Lastly, as Craig said, what is her goal? Revenge against the guy? To overcome her PTSD? To find a family?
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