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After the abrupt revelation of a family secret forced a now twice orphaned boy into a life of seedy trailer parks, he sets out on a last-ditch journey to assemble a cast of family members he needs to make a home of his own.
What is the primary goal the MC is trying to achieve? Does he want a father and mother? Or, father, mother and sister? Or, father, mother, sister, and brother? Will he make a man and woman fall in love with each other to live together or finding a pre existing couple? Or, a pre existing family to joRead more
What is the primary goal the MC is trying to achieve?
Does he want a father and mother? Or, father, mother and sister? Or, father, mother, sister, and brother? Will he make a man and woman fall in love with each other to live together or finding a pre existing couple? Or, a pre existing family to join?
Point is the goal and action he will take are unclear. Further, what specific event starts him off, i.e what specifically happens to him that motivates him to need to find a family?
See lessDuring WW2, in occupied France, a former underdog cyclist working for the Resistance must compete in a national race organized by the Nazis to secretly carry out a vital microfilm to the Allied Forces at the Spanish border.
Will the story be about the cyclist riding through the countryside? Or will it be about his preparations leading up to the race? Or will it be after the race, him trying to hand over the film? Or all the above? I ask as his action of cycling in the race isn't going to make for good cinema. Think aboRead more
Will the story be about the cyclist riding through the countryside? Or will it be about his preparations leading up to the race? Or will it be after the race, him trying to hand over the film? Or all the above?
I ask as his action of cycling in the race isn’t going to make for good cinema. Think about it, he cycles, then he cycles some more , etc… Unless there is a conspiracy to take him out during the race, in which case, he’ll be dodging assassination attempts alone on the road – this would make for an interesting action full sequence.
Personally, I find the lead up to the race interesting – Will the Nazis catch him obtaining the microfilm? Will he get under way carrying his precious cargo? The stakes are high and the danger is clear. However, that would only be act 1, therefore I think it would be best to introduce a Nazi spy competing against him in the race and trying to kill him – this will give you an act 2. Act 3 can be him struggling/fighting to deliver the microfilm.
However, I still believe that the story needs a powerfully motivating inciting incident. Perhaps the Nazi’s could kill his brother, and former cycling champion, after declaring they will hold the race?
See lessThis is an idea I’ve had for a while for a short film: After a depressed alien calls into a radio show and threatens to destroy the city, the host, a suicidal middle aged woman, must talk down the alien and prevent mass destruction.
The inciting incident needs to be irrevocable proof that a danger to the city exists, or else it fails to provide the necessary and sudden shift in the world of the MC. Secondly, about the goal: just talking a terrorist out of doing the bad thing they intend to do is not enough. If someone outrightRead more
The inciting incident needs to be irrevocable proof that a danger to the city exists, or else it fails to provide the necessary and sudden shift in the world of the MC.
Secondly, about the goal: just talking a terrorist out of doing the bad thing they intend to do is not enough. If someone outright threatens the lives of all the people in the city I live in, I would have to catch them and put them in jail to rest at ease. The goal, therefore, doesn’t match up to the stakes at hand. Perhaps make it so she needs to keep him on the line long enough for the authorities to trace his call and find his location.
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