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When a desperate Wisconsin farm wife invites WWII Nazi POWs to work the family orchard, she brings the war home.
It sounds as if the migrant workers' mass exodus is one catalyst which forces her to take action - get POWs to work on the farm, she then pursues the goal of saving the farm. This is one story with its own inciting incident, action, and goal, and the love stories could make for great subplots. HowevRead more
It sounds as if the migrant workers’ mass exodus is one catalyst which forces her to take action – get POWs to work on the farm, she then pursues the goal of saving the farm.
This is one story with its own inciting incident, action, and goal, and the love stories could make for great subplots.
However, this could be turned into a family drama by specifying the rape attempt and falling for Karl as the inciting incident, which forces her to take action – keep the family and farm together for the kid’s sake, she then pursues her goal of a relationship with Karl.
This is definitely a good backdrop for a story, it’s just that you have too many subplots competing to be the ‘A’ plot in the film. Which of these do you prefer to write about in the script?
See lessA teenage Jewish boy in a Nazi death camp sets out to keep the promise of love with Hitler’s daughter and find the mystery of her who once tricked him as Jewish from the genocide.
Agreed with DPG. The multiple attempts at this logline alone bare testimony to a problem with the story, perhaps try a different angle.
Agreed with DPG.
The multiple attempts at this logline alone bare testimony to a problem with the story, perhaps try a different angle.
See lessReword #2: When she is abducted by her estranged father so she can be spared, a stubborn humanitarian must find a way to prevent him from killing most of humanity.
As mentioned in previous posts, how humanity will be killed is important. What is it she is trying to stop? Her goal and actions are very important for the reader to understand the plot.
As mentioned in previous posts, how humanity will be killed is important. What is it she is trying to stop?
See lessHer goal and actions are very important for the reader to understand the plot.