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A girl obsessed with UFO’s builds a small device to alert us, when the device goes off during a storm she encounters a strange figure.
The problem with this concept is a lack of a clear and causally connected goal for the main character. The father angle should be dropped, as the alien plot is more interesting. Seeing the alien can't be her goal - she achieved it with little obstacle. Considering the alien plot, what is it she wantRead more
The problem with this concept is a lack of a clear and causally connected goal for the main character. The father angle should be dropped, as the alien plot is more interesting.
Seeing the alien can’t be her goal – she achieved it with little obstacle.
Considering the alien plot, what is it she wants after she sees the alien?
See lessWorking title: MISSLE (or GOD OF DESTRUCTION) Logline: After helplessly witnessing his brother murdered by a vicious gang, a disabled man in LA sets out one night on his homemade killing machine to seek vengeance.
Really good suggestion by Richiev.
Really good suggestion by Richiev.
See lessWhen a young ward of the state is fostered to a crazy family planning a heist, he sets out to find his real father before being forced to engage in criminal activities that will see him back in juvenile prison.
Hi Benny, I don't think him simply wanting to find out the identity of his father is enough. It seems like a melodramatic need instead of a dramatic one. For it to work, I dare say, you will need to expand a lot of script on exposition and backstory explaining why, for this one particular boy, his fRead more
Hi Benny,
I don’t think him simply wanting to find out the identity of his father is enough. It seems like a melodramatic need instead of a dramatic one. For it to work, I dare say, you will need to expand a lot of script on exposition and backstory explaining why, for this one particular boy, his father’s identity means so much as to become a story worthy goal.
Is there a different goal relating to the father you could use instead?
Just a thought, but what if he had a sister and she needs a life-saving kidney or bone marrow donation. The authoratise have it on file that the father is the only one capable of providing them with the necessary tissue, now the boy has a dramatic need he MUST fulfill or else he will lose the only other person he cares about.
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