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Aliens in need of a battlefield chose earth for their war, now in the remnant of the devastating war; a suicidal man must find a reason to save humanity, which is facing extinction.
There is a disconnect in the cause and effect between the events in the logline. If it's an alien species who destroy Earth wouldn't all mankind stand up and fight? Why only this guy? If it's the alien war that's the inciting incident then shouldn't the MC's goal be to stop the war or end it? RightRead more
There is a disconnect in the cause and effect between the events in the logline.
If it’s an alien species who destroy Earth wouldn’t all mankind stand up and fight? Why only this guy?
If it’s the alien war that’s the inciting incident then shouldn’t the MC’s goal be to stop the war or end it? Right now it reads as if the war is really only a back story and can be cut from the logline.
See lessWhen deep brain trauma escalates a literary gifted teens perception of recovery to a pain crippling head he creatively channels the aid of a science fictional character to restore his identity a locked coma
The last draft of the logline is even more cryptic than the first ? there are too many unclear elements lacking a cause and effect.Use a different description to ??literary gifted?? ? most people don?t know what that means, it seems to have little if no impact on the plot and isn?t an understandableRead more
The last draft of the logline is even more cryptic than the first ? there are too many unclear elements lacking a cause and effect.
Use a different description to ??literary gifted?? ? most people don?t know what that means, it seems to have little if no impact on the plot and isn?t an understandable flaw that indicates an inner journey for the MC.
Give him a different inciting incident, or describe it in clear terms ? escalating someone?s perception of a recovery is vague, most people reading this would have no idea what it means.
Give him a different course of action or describe it in another way. How does he channel a fictional character? This is unclear. Is the MC a fictional character? Does he live in a fictional universe?
How does restoring his identity connect to any of the elements described in the concept? Is there a different more concrete goal you can give the MC to achieve?
After three girls are kidnapped by a man with multiple personalities they must find some of the different personalities that can help them while running away and staying alive from the others. – Split
The concept of dealing with a multiple personality Psychotic could be interesting, however, the logline needs to be streamlined in its wording. Why three girls? Can you make it one? The concept would likely work just as well, and allow the reader to focus their attention on one MC. For example: AfteRead more
The concept of dealing with a multiple personality Psychotic could be interesting, however, the logline needs to be streamlined in its wording.
Why three girls? Can you make it one? The concept would likely work just as well, and allow the reader to focus their attention on one MC.
For example:
See lessAfter a [good description] girl is kidnapped by a multiple personality man, she must work with the sympathetic personality of her captor to fight the psychotic one.